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0 posted 2005-08-30 03:31 PM




Sound of dry tan grass

Slow shadows blurred by the heat

Quick fluorescent pain!


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1 posted 2005-08-30 03:38 PM


Very descriptive and well thought out Haiku/Senryu Ed.  Well done
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2 posted 2005-08-30 04:02 PM


Ed...I sure hope you didn't get bit!!
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3 posted 2005-08-30 04:39 PM


I get bit allatime, one kind of snake or another.....I've built up a reisistance to most of 'em by now.

Closest I ever got to a reptilian snake's bite was while beaching a canoe, and the cottonmouth's big white mouth was half-way to me at the instant my reflexive swing of the paddle cut him in half..... Amazing how big that mouth gets, when it's coming AT you.....!

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4 posted 2005-08-30 07:23 PM


Oh! Yuck! Yuck!
I do not like snakes.I live by the water so we have a few and SPIDERS.....
Hugs BonBon

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5 posted 2005-08-30 09:44 PM


this haiku kind of
snakes up on you!





Corinne

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6 posted 2005-08-31 06:14 AM


I have water mocs around here at work...now I'm not going to go walking around in the dark again LOL
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7 posted 2005-08-31 08:44 AM


you've given long legs to so few words...

you had my mouth agape when you described the cotton mouth that almost got you...

whewww....

Morning

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8 posted 2005-09-01 04:11 PM


Yikes!!!! *S* Your words may be few, but they pack enough power to have me jumping back from my screen... only to creep forward in complete admiration. *S*

Absolutely excellent!!! *S*

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