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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2005-08-28 04:22 AM


Deep within me,
I am hunting,

search
and destroy.


Time has
an unbearable hold upon me,

this has
to be a dream..for
the words

melt across the page
untill they are illegible.

There is something about you
that I did not notice before,
something greater than I am..
and you are this creature,
much different
than the rest,
incredibly strong
yet without conviction,

you leave me bound in confusion..


Come to me
envelope me in
warmth
and leave me
cold

leave me
I have lost
a blossom of hope,

burning
my bridges behind me,

you..
are my reflection,
deeply defiant and
content in rage..

Tell me,
how is it
that you are both pure

and empty?

Both nonexistent
and perfect.

leave me

let me be crucified

alone.



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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-08-28 11:26 AM


gawd Meg...this aches so much
inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2005-08-28 04:36 PM


feeling the torment in this
coming across the screen
good to see you posting again

Margherita
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3 posted 2005-08-28 07:04 PM


quote:
Come to me
envelope me in
warmth
and leave me
cold

leave me
I have lost
a blossom of hope,




This is powerfully expressed and it hurts.

Very well rendered inner torment.

Love,
Margherita

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4 posted 2005-08-28 10:36 PM


For one of the very few times in my life, I am speechless...

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5 posted 2005-08-29 02:17 PM


this has
to be a dream..for
the words

melt across the page
untill they are illegible


You describe perfectly, those nauseating times where you are awake and walking around in confusion, but it feels like everything else is moving, because you feel like you must be either dead, or asleep. Where words blur and become sealike. Ugh.

And I love the strong opening lines, which made me imagine you in a computer game, playing against yourself.  

dgvarner
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6 posted 2005-08-29 02:23 PM


deep stuff..

hugs, g

vandana
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7 posted 2005-10-10 11:49 AM


good read
Martie
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8 posted 2005-10-10 01:45 PM


In your hunting, you bring out the deepest part!  
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Between the Lines
9 posted 2005-10-10 02:30 PM


Tell me,
how is it
that you are both pure

and empty?

Both nonexistent
and perfect.

wonderful writing..very meaningful to me

M

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10 posted 2005-10-10 03:24 PM


This poem....should be required reading. No ifs, no ands, no buts. Required.

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11 posted 2005-10-11 04:00 PM


following the pitter patter of Ed's thoughts ...

    ... and firmly placed them within the required lines of my scope.


             you ache deeply      


CT

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12 posted 2005-10-11 04:07 PM


Oh, this aches..

m xx

~i want for myself your trembling~

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13 posted 2005-10-13 04:28 PM


Oh, my... I'm speechless... Both the power and the pain are stunning... Excellent write!
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14 posted 2005-10-13 05:56 PM


good luck in the hunt

and then He created the horse...

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15 posted 2005-10-13 11:20 PM


This just aches of yearning, and a need of validation.  Meg, the self-discovery holds the key to all our happiness that is for damn sure.  
StevenS
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16 posted 2005-10-13 11:51 PM


Kaoru you are a complicated, sophisticated and strong little lady...with claws. Alway's delightfully so.
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