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0 posted 2005-08-26 03:45 PM




Silence

I spun this out of black and silver

to shape some color of gray

my fingers have the need of touch

he understands the connection

I prefer his laugh
in fragments of day for he

captivates me

like rain disappearing
into the blue of dusk
beauty of images
rich shades of darkness

I try but often fail
to catch the sound of their shapes
on my tongue --

echo too faint
over each
like

slow change of color
in Septembers light  

absorbing fibers
of each hand  beyond
the shadows defined in
traces   of   air


breathing in


{that his words
have stirred this heart}


I place you there

beauty filling eyes to

seep the ashes of warmth

as if you were never alone

while the sky stirs blue
~


I pray for sleep
that I may awake again
to gentle eyes

so winter will not need a reason

to stand alone


~~**~~
You're so vain
you probably think this
song is about you (CS)
~~**~~

© Copyright 2005 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2005-08-26 03:49 PM


"my fingers have the need of touch

he understands the connection

I prefer his laugh
in fragments of day for he

captivates me"

Those lines touched me most...I know it.  

and I am glad you do to because it is something special.


"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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2 posted 2005-08-26 03:53 PM


Hi there Susan

I am glad you made the connection to those lines, as they are special....it means a lot to know your thoughts, thank YOU...




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3 posted 2005-08-26 03:55 PM


of course I'm so vain..I think everythng is about me... lol

very nicely done ma'am.. indeed..

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4 posted 2005-08-26 03:57 PM




hi Cpat thanks for stopping in....good to see you, and I noticed you posted, I am heading to read....

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5 posted 2005-08-26 04:30 PM


and YOU captivate me, lovie

Beautiful writing

Mxx

~i want for myself your trembling~

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6 posted 2005-08-26 04:32 PM


  HI Lady Lauren....

I'm breathing this one in sooo...

I;ll be back to do it true justice...

later.  

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7 posted 2005-08-26 04:47 PM


Maree~

thank you dear for adding a smile to my face....

Donna~
luv ya too thank you

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8 posted 2005-08-27 07:31 AM


"I try but often fail
to catch the sound of their shapes
on my tongue --

echo too faint
over each like

slow change of color
in Septembers light  

absorbing fibers
of each hand  beyond
the shadows defined in
traces   of   air"

See, this is what I miss when I stray too far from the porch.  
Fine write to have with my Kona this AM, Loopy...  
(But I thought we agreed that you'd not write of me in public any longer.)     



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9 posted 2005-08-27 09:23 AM


Hi Duncan...

good to see you, missed you....hope all is well bud...hugsss you and stick around will ya? please? being off the porch could  be good for you.... never know ... thanks for stopping by....

ctowen
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10 posted 2005-08-27 09:32 AM


Silence ...
captivates me ...

_______________________________


      and so does the
          flutter of these butterflies!!


luvs

CT

A word in hand is worth two in a hush ...  CTOwen/05

              

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11 posted 2005-08-27 11:02 AM


hi craig~

the butterflies are soaring here... thanks for stopping in, see ya soon..

Ceinwyn
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12 posted 2005-08-27 05:37 PM


this makes my heart ache...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2005-08-29 09:33 AM


"I prefer his laugh
in fragments of day for he

captivates me

like rain disappearing
into the blue of dusk
beauty of images
rich shades of darkness

I try but often fail
to catch the sound of their shapes
on my tongue --"


Hey gal, told you I would be back after I savored this one a while...

my sis,
but, you NEVER fail to captivate
with your words Dear Lauren.

You take poetry
and lace the edges with an
eloquence that graces
this readers eyes and leaves
me with a sigh of
and a smile.  

  

JesusChristPose
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14 posted 2005-09-04 11:33 PM


As always, your words paint a picture likened to a Rembrandt.

Enjoyed.

"If this grand panaorama before me is what you call God... then God is not dead."

Bodger
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15 posted 2005-09-05 05:02 PM


Masterpiece

Bodger

ctowen
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16 posted 2005-09-06 05:43 PM


.... once more into the breach,
      

      I have found myself re-reading this
                again and again ...
                  ....  lovingly

    BTT (back to the top)

           CT

A word in hand is worth two in a hush ...  CTOwen/05

              

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17 posted 2005-09-07 09:42 AM


thanks guys....

hugsss all and much love for taking time to comment...

Dark Stranger
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18 posted 2005-09-08 08:19 AM


something back there
in that back room of you
glows under the doors
makes me want to

enter without knocking

enjoyed it lady lauren

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