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Martie
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0 posted 2005-08-24 05:38 PM


I Estrogen

I remember when I first saw you
curving around like your mother with vermilion,
then writing on small pieces of paper with pencil.
I took your hand and traced a thought that you hid
in the dry shingles outside our bedroom window.

You were my history and my beginning
and I was a road you would take,

hot,

under the trees to seek shade from my hold,
and even there I made your fantasy
with lipstick and tweezers
and the sweet smell of dirt.

Naked you were a circle within a circle,
because I was your instrument of energy and life
playing something about beloved
and I taught you the words
although you couldn’t say them outloud.

Ask me how I know so much,  I said into your dream
where you rode horses
and wept for loss of blood.

I am your woman…I whispered back, knowing the untruth
but saying it anyway.

When you moaned I mentioned I’d only be with you for a while
and made a path within your heart that said hurry,
hurry,  for the time you know…it ticks.

You hurried for me like a perfect host
and pre-teened into a blossom of beguile.

I know I didn’t tell you or help you along with this,
for you see I enjoy the effect I have on play.

I bore your children with you, felt the milk drop,
listened endlessly
for a change in voice…the nuance that tells what’s under
the thought of the men you loved.
I was your eyes that saw all directions of your children.

And now you curse me with your moody down.  
Be thankful I was there, as I am for you, the teacher of this
small place where I gathered..

I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart…not your heat,

and now

when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder
if you ever needed me at all.
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8-02...repost because I am

[This message has been edited by Martie (08-24-2005 06:11 PM).]

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Larry C
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1 posted 2005-08-24 05:49 PM


I know femininity has it's price. I'm so grateful women are willing to go there. What a fabulous write. You rock.
okay and

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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2 posted 2005-08-24 05:51 PM


ah! the poet days can conjure reposts too and that's a wonderful thing!
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3 posted 2005-08-24 06:25 PM


Martie, I am so glad that you reposted this as I don't believe I have seen it before.
I love your thoughts in this and the flow.
Again, you have amazed me with your ability to allow the reader to see little glimpses into your soul..

and what a lovely soul it is.  

Ya done good with this one dear....
real good.  

Hugs you.

yesterday is gone
tomorrow doesn't exist

ice
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4 posted 2005-08-24 08:20 PM


I ­testosterone, love this poem....
Sunshine
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5 posted 2005-08-24 08:35 PM


You most certainly, are...

and it is not until
you slip into this phase,
can you know it
so personally,
so well.

But you write it, beautifully.

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6 posted 2005-08-25 02:51 AM


Martie - this is absolutely wonderful.  Made me smile and made me cry!
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7 posted 2005-08-25 03:14 AM


You were my history and my beginning
and I was a road you would take,

hot

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Only you could make the connection and write the circle so right~

Hugs, Martie~

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8 posted 2005-08-25 07:03 AM


Oh Martie, it's truly a joy to read you and this magnificent penning.

Thank you for the repost



a

Mxx

~i want for myself your trembling~

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9 posted 2005-08-25 07:53 AM


is that the stuff the make latte's with?

you are femifine lady!! enjoyed this one

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10 posted 2005-08-25 09:18 AM


I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart…not your heat,

and now

now my friend, isn't it kind of miraculous to wonder what the next moment will bring...for I see here, that so far, the moments have been very good teachers to you...you are gifted...loved, and extremely wise...

magnificant write...thank you for reposting and giving me the opportunity to see your heartwords...
Love
Lee J.

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11 posted 2005-08-25 09:51 AM


Don't think I have seen this before...

Thank you Martie for reposting...it is truly a deeply moving piece.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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12 posted 2005-08-25 10:05 AM


MartieSis~

You write the all of us~

'the nuance that tells what’s under
the thought of the men you loved.'


Your word-eyes go where so many of us have not the talent to do~
I love you~
*Huglets*:hugs*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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13 posted 2005-08-25 10:24 AM


"I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul,
and how you loved within your heart…not your heat,"

..."and now"...

~ Those lines near brought me to tears.

Hugs with love,
Linda

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14 posted 2005-08-25 11:15 PM


"pre-teened into a blossom of beguile"

yes
all of it

very nice marti

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15 posted 2005-08-26 12:31 PM


"And now you curse me with your moody down."

and most days are difficult, but I wouldn't trade one for a day of not knowing...

women...we have the pull of tides within our very womb.

and yes, sometimes that hurts, but most times it's just what it is--the knowledge and the comfort of knowledge of creation and thus all eternity.

You write worlds. Beautiful!

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16 posted 2005-08-26 03:26 AM


B-e-autiful.

I love it!

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17 posted 2005-08-26 09:08 AM


             woman
            holds
     the tide
              itself
         a man
    merely
           surf


And always you say truth, Martie... say it with beauty and understanding in every word.

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18 posted 2005-08-26 09:50 AM


Yet another poem I thought I'd commented on.

Sheesh....must be gettin' old

Just let me agree with Karen, then

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19 posted 2005-08-26 12:28 PM


Martie~

the wisdom in this is refreshing....I, thank you too, for reposting it.....

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20 posted 2005-08-26 05:44 PM


brava ma'am... brava!!


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21 posted 2005-08-27 01:05 AM


Martie, I'm so glad you reposted 'cuz I had missed it.  This is extraordinary, as is being a woman!!!!  Great write!   from one who knows the effects of heat ... lol  ....jo
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22 posted 2005-09-01 03:53 PM


and I taught you the words
although you couldn’t say them outloud.

You say them now, dear lady... and you say them with perfection. *S* This... is magnificent!

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23 posted 2005-09-02 10:05 AM


I still like this poem, but I'll go with testosterone as a personal choice any day.  I think they both are mind altering drugs, but at least with the "T" I can crush beer cans on my skull.  *GRINNNNNNN*
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24 posted 2005-09-06 05:18 PM


Wonderfully done Martie - your writing is just SO VERY VIVID - loved it - Paul
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