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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2005-08-23 07:21 AM


That ones' breathing should gauge
the effects of a place
stands as testament bouyed
by the gentlest of winds.

Just a hint of a breeze,
its' slight touch on your face,
speaks of vistas out-stretched
where the atmosphere thins.

Like the thermals which rise
to provide needed lift,
are thoughts granted ascent
through an effortless glide.

In the strata to drift
as a wraith, a mere wisp
on the currents outbound
where the skies open wide.

Are these avian dreams
or some ancestral trait,
rising out of the fog,
on some level, somewhere?

In a manner of speech,
seen from this vantage point,
these are matters described
as much lighter than air.

© Copyright 2005 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2005-08-23 07:28 AM


Dr.Moose1
I believe you are right. Enjoyed the read.

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2005-08-23 09:54 AM


Oh, yes, you are right, you definitely are!  Great piece - enjoyed.  
Startime55
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3 posted 2005-08-23 10:15 AM


Absolutely wonderful...I love the way you have put it...my imagination flew with you...Bravo!!! *big hugs*
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4 posted 2005-08-23 12:13 PM


Doc~
I adore your rhyme scheme ... and the message is saged~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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iliana
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5 posted 2005-08-23 01:21 PM


Loved the rhythm of this, not to mention your words!   .....jo
Dr.Moose1
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6 posted 2005-08-23 04:30 PM


Sy,
Thanks, I realize I kinda answered my own question, but hey, its always great to get a second opinion !

Honeybunch,
Thank you, like the old saying goes, "I thought I was wrong once, but, it turns out I was mistaken."

Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2005-08-24 04:52 PM


Startime55,
Thank you ,I'm truly glad you enjoyed.
Doc

Dear Marge,
You can fly with me anytime.
Doc

Iliana,
Thanks so much. I believe it was Nancy Ness who said ( when speaking about plaigerism )
"Sometimes words are all a poet has", and, I must agree because lord knows it sure doesn't
pay very well.
Doc

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2005-08-25 11:18 AM


"That ones' breathing should gauge
the effects of a place
stands as testament bouyed
by the gentlest of winds.

Just a hint of a breeze,
its' slight touch on your face,
speaks of vistas out-stretched
where the atmosphere thins"

Oh doc!  This makes me ever so glad I went searching...

This touched me in so many ways...

Thank you.  

A keeper for sure.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2005-08-25 11:27 AM


Dr. Moose, your words are like the "gentlest of winds" that touch my face with "just a hint of a breeze"...


EA

Martie
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10 posted 2005-08-25 07:42 PM


Doc....As always, I enjoyed reading your words.  Thanks!  
Dr.Moose1
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11 posted 2005-08-27 08:35 PM


Susan,
I'm glad you liked. I know I enjoyed writing it.
Doc

Earth Angel,
Thank you very kindly. I'm glad you liked.
Doc

Dear Martie,
Who was it that said " All words lead to poems?" Yeah, I don't know either, but, It sounded good at the time. Thank you!
Doc

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