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SimplyGold
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0 posted 2005-08-22 10:43 AM


Change

Dreaming at the edge of summer
    while leaves rock-a-bye
Wandering on the inside

The sun takes a deep breath
    descending into her cradle
making way for the new moon
    In sync with my forlorn swoon
    
I sit and ponder days gone by
    thinking of earlier smiles
Fall is soon to be here reminding
    me that all things change
It is nature's way of renewal
    and I am her child

Everything moves forward
    Everything is on its way to some place
Somewhere left behind is a memory
    Today, I am the keeper of records



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SimplyGold
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1 posted 2005-08-22 10:46 AM


Note, this is a rewrite based on a suggestion from Bodger. Feedback welcome.

Thank you Bodger.

SG

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
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2 posted 2005-08-22 10:53 AM


This is just simply perfect.

Fall is soon to be here reminding
    me that all things change
It is nature's way of renewal
    and I am her child


You dip into the past, yet remain in the present.   Perfect.

SimplyGold
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3 posted 2005-08-22 11:06 AM


Thank you Littlewing.
SG

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2005-08-23 10:18 AM


SG, I concur with our Little-Winged friend! ~ and I am saving this poem to savor again and again...



EA

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
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5 posted 2005-08-23 10:31 AM


You describe it just the way I feel....I love it...Absolutely wonderful...*big hugs*

SimplyGold
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6 posted 2005-08-23 11:28 AM


EA

Thank you for your feedback. I am always thrilled when you give me your input.
Angel that you are

SG

SimplyGold
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7 posted 2005-08-23 11:31 AM


Startime55,

Thank you for peeking in and your reply. Moments like these are gifts, I'm honored to share with you!

SG

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