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soul drifter
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0 posted 2005-12-18 03:31 PM


Murmur

I woke up this morning,
it was bluer than blood
rubbed my eyes
looked at my life, this cheap dud
of a missle aimed at her smile
she decorates her heart
with the bones of other guys
leaving me shivering from the start
the opening crescendo of the day
sighing my best sigh
I go out into the light
and throw myself into the fray
the velocity of this ferocity
inside traffic jammed minds
takes me for all I'm worth
if I'm even worth the time

Lonely's like that I guess
it puts on the prettiest dress
but leaves you to freeze in the night
covering your wounds from the pain of light
that everyone shines on you
it's such a drag to need it so bad
lonely looks good on you
my friend

So welcome to the parade of pathetic pathelogical liars
close in the crowd, shout it out loud, and light the fires
that'll burn me, turn me into a "normal person"
normal by the standards of people who don't listen
to the soft murmur in your heartbeat
there's too much noise out on the street
after all

I went to bed this evening,
and awoke in another man's dreams
I held my head
looked at my life, torn apart at the seams
she decorates my heart
with the bloody words she said
when she left me shivering from the start
the closing credits of the day
crying my best cry
I go out without a fight
and throw myself into the fray
the vicious terror of eyes that stare
back into my own tonight
takes me for all I'm worth
if I'm worth a second sight

Sanity's like that I guess
it puts you to the test
but breaks your pencil before the end
you cover your answers to defend
the secrets of being you
it's such a drag to bleed so bad
sanity is leaving you too
my friend

So welcome to the paradise of psycoholics anonymous
close your eyes, don't tell no lies, and Merry Christmas
surprise, you get to become a "cleansed soul"
clean by the standards of people who don't feel the pull
in the soft murmur of your heartbeat
to the dark alleys away from the street
anyway

I woke up in a fog of confusion,
I was lost in the flood
I closed my eyes
felt a pull in the compass of my blood
towards her north star heart
to lead me through this mist of cries
of skeleton loners shivering for a brand new start
the faded typewriter words of this day
got me lying my best lie
I surrender to the dark night
and throw myself into the fray
the raging mind that seems to find
a way back into the light
before I'm stripped of all I'm worth
if I'm worth another fight

My soul is like that I guess
it makes me feel less and less
when my heart screams for more and more
love and peace inside me like a revolving door
it's the secret of being me
such a drag to want so bad
another soul to understand me
and be my friend

So you're welcome to a pair of wings made from the things
I tried to throw away, I let it end this way, so on and on I'll sing
for another way out to the wide open life of a "nice guy"
nice by the standards of people who could only try
and listen to the soft murmur in my heartbeat
like the subway racing underneath the street
take me away

And the sky was bloodier than the blue
light that shivers inside you
it takes me for all I'm worth
and leaves me falling towards the earth
my friend

"The moon ain't romantic, it's intimidating as hell". -- Tom Waits, 'Bad Liver and a Broken Heart'

© Copyright 2005 Zach Hilgefort - All Rights Reserved
majnu
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1 posted 2005-12-18 08:14 PM


rather well done. the flow is a bit choppy and with its length that is a serious drawback, but even so, you have some amazing images/metaphors/similes in their - some of them striking in their originality.

-majnu
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