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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2005-08-16 08:25 PM


Would that I be the Gentle rain
To wash down your mountainous burden,
To cleanse your troubles
Flowing over rock faces
And between your boulders,
Caressing your graces.
Could that I carry your woes
Down to where are lush meadows
And flowers blooming full,
Moving those rough pebbles
Whether they need push or pull
Let me remove your troubles.
Let my gentle rain comfort you
Till time returns skies of blue
And your foundation is strong
And head is in fluffy clouds,
When you return to a happy song,
Content, confident and proud.

Gloom


© Copyright 2005 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2005-08-16 08:30 PM


Gandolf, this is beautiful.  Hey...how ya been? ........ ....jo
MyHeartofShadows
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2 posted 2005-08-16 08:33 PM


You might be the Rain, but you seem like a mountan of strength to me.
Larry C
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3 posted 2005-08-16 08:40 PM


Prof,
Some how I think you can. Lovely, soothing write. I'm proud to know you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2005-08-16 08:46 PM


Thank you, Jo
I’ve been busy,
Hence the lack of posting.
Pleased my Grayness can give a bit to you
To enjoy.

Thank you, MyHeart,
In nature all is mixed,
There is comfort in comforting
Strength in supporting others.

Thank you, Larry
Glad you liked
And it’s a honor to call you a friend.
(promise the next prose installment soon
if I can stop rewriting it)

Gloom

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-08-17 09:19 AM


a very generous offering, which people everywhere are so in need of.....

and can't help but wonder why that is...can you?

Well done hun, enjoyed this splendid articulation of your heart.


nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2005-08-17 09:41 AM


I hang my thoughts,
those of before
and those of now
impressed by
the softness of words,
caring, so often lacking
letting them paint my body
with fragments of memory,
gentle strokes in blending.

Have I told you lately?
No, been walking alone too much
words being planted
where they cannot grow.

The seeds of my unrest
suffer me, linking beyond my yesterdays
when all I wish for is
the myst from the reign of ...

*inspired this morning

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2005-08-17 09:47 AM


Professor,
She needs but a teaspoon of this every morning.  

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2005-08-17 09:54 AM


Prof~
Know what ???

This is a gentle word-light that shines brightly~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Copperbell
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9 posted 2005-08-17 10:09 AM


Beautiful Professor - nice to read you again
Nightshade
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just out of reach
10 posted 2005-08-17 10:21 AM


Just lovely Gloom. A pleasure to read.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2005-08-17 07:59 PM


Mr Gloom now this is absolutely soft, gentle, and so very lovely.
Nice to see this from your pen.

yesterday is gone
tomorrow doesn't exist

Midnitesun
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Gaia
12 posted 2005-08-17 08:10 PM


That's two beauties in one day I've read from your pen, Professor.
*A pair of A+ writes*

nn
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13 posted 2005-08-18 04:53 AM



Earth Angel
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14 posted 2005-08-18 07:38 AM


There is nothing Gloom-y about this sensually beautiful piece of writing! I thoroughly enjoyed this gift from your pen ~ and heart!

You write of the dark and of the Light, equally well! It is just that we "angels" prefer the latter!

Love & Light,
EA

miscellanea
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15 posted 2005-08-18 01:12 PM


Thank goodness for gentle people as yourself.  Enjoyed very much.

         msicellanea

Professor Gloom
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16 posted 2005-08-18 09:34 PM


Thank You. Everyone,
I am surprised by the response to this one,
But well pleased.

Gloom

Susan Caldwell
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17 posted 2005-08-22 11:08 AM


This sounds like something I could use!!

Well done Mr. Gloomy one!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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