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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2005-08-16 04:57 PM


i'm going to speak from my heart
i'm going to tell you
that
i
can't
breathe
when you sit next to me

that
i
can't
think
when you speak to me
and your blue eyes tear through me
like you've known me forever
but still know nothing

it breaks my heart
not being able
to let my words
my voice
into your heart

it breaks my heart
not telling you
you're keeping me together
that this
connection
through the absence of one
is both
my savour
and
my downfall


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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-08-16 05:02 PM


God Chelsea, this aches...
--------------------------
that
i
can't
think
when you speak to me
and your blue eyes tear through me
like you've known me forever
but still know nothing
--------------------------

feeling this one with you dear gal...

very well stated,
perfectly written.

yesterday is gone
tomorrow doesn't exist

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
2 posted 2005-08-16 05:07 PM


wow...the beginning and ending verses just rocked!
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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3 posted 2005-08-21 10:55 AM



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