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Paul Wilson
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0 posted 2005-08-14 02:54 AM




The Perfect Trap
By Paul Wilson


Happiness never meant for me
I’ve tried but you won’t set me free
A touch of force is all you know
Tenderness and love never show

Sobs and tears never heard or seen
Why I wonder are you so mean
Touch me again and I will die
You smile in victory…I cry

This hole is my prison for life
All I’ve ever known pain and strife
Today’s the day I stop your rage
I’ve found strength too unlock the cage

My plan is simple wait and see
When it’s all done I will be free
I’ll lure you in with all my charm
I’ll capture you they’ll be no harm

There will be no more tears from me
After today I will be free
Revenge and victory is sweet
Now you wallow in your defeat

No more cat and mouse games for me
This time the mouse will have the key
Play your games and remember that
This little mouse caught the big cat



~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul


[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (08-14-2005 05:21 AM).]

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Startime55
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1 posted 2005-08-14 11:08 AM


A heart filled with so much pain is reflected in your words...I find the place you write of very familiar to most of my life...after I found the key I learned how to use it and began to heal by writing out my pain...when the time was right I was ready to share myself again and now both of us hold the key and care for the heart of each other....I pray all goes well for you and your tears help to heal your heart...*big hugs*

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2 posted 2005-08-14 03:48 PM


It all sounds attack

And when we run out of attacks

Who do we attack next

How often are people just a vehicle for anger because we know we are stuffed and can't get out and so we take it out on others

Acknowledge the wind-up merchants;  the trouble makers and that life is from yourself

Bodger

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3 posted 2005-08-14 04:00 PM


Paul, you have written perfectly the way heartache and the
pain of feeling trapped feels. And, then the
way someone feels when they've decided not to put
up with it anymore!! I've been there before and it
is so painful to be treated like that by someone.
I've said it lots of times and I really believe it.....
the pain and scars from emotional and verbal abuse
sometimes last lots longer than the ones of physical abuse.

I realize you may have something entirely different in mind
but this is what I thought of when I read it.
Thanks for sharing  with us.
Hugs,
Ethel

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4 posted 2005-08-14 05:23 PM


To all

Thanks for reading and for your caring replies. When I started writing this your comments are just what I had in mind. It was gonna be about spousal abuse, but I thought it might be a touchy subject, so I sort of kept the same train of thought but changed the characters to a cat and mouse to give it a little humor.
I guess no matter how we change or try too cover up our true feelings they still show through.

This is only fictional for me and I hope it doesn't upset anyone...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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5 posted 2005-08-15 04:21 AM


been there and got out~
takes a while to get to a nicer place
when wounds are deep~
but at least away
wounds can start to heal
when before they had no chance
to heal, and when you find yourself
becoming as them, thats when you know
its time to go, when nothing works to change anything for better, as one works only against it, making wounds deeper and not allowing changes, get out as fast as you can, i learned the hard way, back and forth, trying to believe the lies when i was out and doing good, so i would go back, then all would be just as before. like i never left.  banging my head on a wall would of felt better. i love him still, but something has control over him, shame it comes in a bottle. but i cant do anything, he has to. sorry for going on here, but you got me thinking about him, and i am glad i live in a different town now.   nice writing

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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6 posted 2005-08-15 03:07 PM


been there a few times, and would not go back for all the money in the world, it drains the soul, and any harmony that could bloom...Paul, my heart goes out to you dear poet...


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7 posted 2005-08-15 06:17 PM


you wrote this so well Paul
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8 posted 2005-08-15 10:07 PM


MGROVES...I apologize if I brought up any bad memories for you. I really hope all is well with you and that situation is a thing of the past.

I wanted this poem too be taken light heartedly as being a story about a little mouse turning the tales on a big mean cat, but somehow it turned out being taken as spousal abuse.( Which was my first line of thought, but I didn't want too bring up bad memories for anyone so I changed it to be about a mouse & cat
Please forgive me if I didn't make that clear in the final stanza.

I really appreciate you taking time too read and for caring, but all is well...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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9 posted 2005-08-15 10:12 PM


LeeJ...I really appreciate your caring reply, I can see where this poem might be taken as spousal abuse cause that was my first subject matter but I wanted it to be just a silly poem about a Cat & Mouse and how the mouse was always getting abused by the cat until the mouse caught the cat in his trap.

I hope all is well with you and thanks very much for caring and your kind words...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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10 posted 2005-08-15 10:15 PM


Dixie...Thank you for that tender reply.

I hope I didn't mislead you about the subject matter, this is just a silly poem about the little mouse getting the best of the big mean cat.

I guess people could take it a couple of different ways. I hope you take it the light hearted way in which it was intended...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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11 posted 2005-08-15 10:17 PM


Mr. Paul Wilson,
I myself have never experince any form abuse
but you my Dear Friend spoke for those who have,never made it out alive.
You gave voice to those who are afraid to speak
and scared to leave.
Why people have to be so hurtful to those they love I'll never know.
Wonderful read.Wish there were more people in this world who cares as much as you do.

Hugs to you my friend.
:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

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12 posted 2005-08-16 12:13 PM


Froggy...Thank you for your kind words.
You give me far too much credit. I am just a humble man speaking my heart.
I would never in my life abuse another human being. Thank you again for taking time too read and reply...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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13 posted 2005-08-16 12:17 PM


an interesting write
and sometimes, even the meekest mouse can get the cat by the tail

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14 posted 2005-08-16 02:29 AM


Memories of my first marriage, Paul.  I've heard men say before, "nice girls like to be treated mean."  That ain't true, nope, it ain't.  Revenge, however, not intended was what it almost always leads, too, and when it finally comes, you realize you really didn't want it after all...you just wanted it over so you could get on with your life.  Anyhow, I'm rambling, but you can blame your poem for that.   ....jo
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15 posted 2005-08-16 05:09 AM


Kacy...Your reply brought a smile to my face. Thanks for the humor and thanks so much for reading and replying...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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16 posted 2005-08-16 05:11 AM


iliana... I don't mind your rambling if you don't. Glad too hear from you. Thanks for the read and caring reply.I would never treat a lady mean...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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17 posted 2005-08-16 06:37 AM


Hi Paul,
Upon going back for another read, yes, certainly can pick up the humor, of which I thank you for, but don't fret dear poet...what one picks up from poetry, reagardless of the author's intention, can be so wonderfully full of rich therapy, a reminder of a place we shouldn't tread again, or, simply serves as thought provoking to the circumstances in one's life, or, self examination, and so goes, the miraculous world of poetry... In it's bliss, poetry serves mankind well, as did this poem of yours  

thank you

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18 posted 2005-08-16 05:32 PM


squeak!

You've just revealed in poetry the bones of this little rodent's plan...




Paul Wilson
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19 posted 2005-08-16 08:18 PM


LeeJ...Glad you could see the humor in this. Thanks again for your insiteful reply...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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20 posted 2005-08-16 08:35 PM


Serenity...Your reply brought a smile to my face.Thanks for the smile & read...Paul

First you know you need a little Catnip or something with the same effect, a whole lotta charm and  a real strong trap. The most important thing is the bait. make sure it is real fresh. LOL

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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