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Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10
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My own little Icey Oblivion

0 posted 2005-08-14 02:47 AM


I take these pills and try to grin,
Swallow hard and take it in.
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
ALL O-VER WITH!!
You know nothing of what's in my head,
So forget all the things I've ever said.
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
ALL O-VER WITH!!
You couldn't possibly understand,
Why I speak with blundered hand.
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
ALL O-VER WITH!!
Have you felt what I have faced?
Some "cure" type drug swallowed and embraced.
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
ALL O-VER WITH!!
You aren't here to see what's around me,
These Icey hands engulf and surround me.
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
ALL O-VER WITH!!
"LET ME OUT! LET ME OUT!" I'm screamin'.
Now I'm...
ALL O-VER WITH!!

i cant taste the poison that im drinking your death is in disguise

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Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
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Alberta, Canada
1 posted 2005-08-14 11:20 AM


Incredibly pain filled...Amazingly powerful writing...*hugs*

Copperbell
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2 posted 2005-08-15 12:13 PM


very strong emotions - makes me ponder the pain here
MGROVES
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california
3 posted 2005-08-15 03:48 AM


powerful emotions  yes

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2005-08-16 03:21 PM


Hi, Hot Flakes! It appears that you have been going through trying times! You powerfully illustrated your angst and frustration in this poem.

~ "Have you felt what I have faced?" ~ Only if I were to walk a mile in your mocassins would I know how you truly feel.

Giving you a big, comforting hug ~ and another drug, (Sorry, I jested re the drug bit!)

EA

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2005-08-16 05:12 PM


this sounds like a song

loved this, because I can relate

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
6 posted 2005-08-16 05:37 PM


Iti does sound like a song, Snowflake -- a pretty heavy one, too.  The rhythm and words sound like they would do well with a metal band. Hope things get better for you.
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