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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2005-08-08 05:33 PM


It is a Requiem for someone.

Sunshine's words made me think to write it.

I should have written it a long time ago and spoken it.

I didn't because I considered my life and career mattered more and I would catch up with life at some point.

I dont offer excuses.

Bodger

As dried grass stunted chafing shoes I watched smoke of trains dancing in the dark of a smoke field night hot steam criss-crossing in a morning light lit by darkness

As the dancing of spirits in her room led to feel a gateway that her brain denied by culture and money locked to she destroyed herself for her daughters to give them the chance denied her

Like a railway announcer's words nothing was understood, expensive actions that delivered not the worth she thought but that her vision was 'her vision'

With a mind and intellect and courage to take everything knowing she was capable of so much more She delivered to those who having lived from her only saw what suited them

In her life she brought forth sons and daughters, made mistakes and lost to the stronger genes

Sleep well my love, sleep soundly, sleep in the knowledge that you will never die

© Copyright 2005 Dave Page - Cirencester UK - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-08-08 06:27 PM


A requiem, indeed...and wonderfully stated.  How pleased am I, that this comes now, upon the heels of so many losses, the very words,

quote:
Sleep well my love, sleep soundly, sleep in the knowledge that you will never die


and it befits man, woman, even child.

In the past few weeks I have read stories that dealt with loss; I have read poems of people I know, dealing with loss; I have read newslines...too...

and that we might never forget, in some hard way, but always leave a light on, if even in our mind...

Ah, Bodger...

Thank you.

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2005-08-08 08:06 PM


Nice writing...James
froggy
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3 posted 2005-08-08 08:47 PM


very well done.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

SmartChick
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4 posted 2005-08-08 09:21 PM


This is absolutely beautiful.
Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
5 posted 2005-08-09 05:36 PM


Thanks Everyone

Bodger

MGROVES
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6 posted 2005-08-11 07:57 AM


nice to hear your thoughts again
and words to think about~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

LeeJ
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7 posted 2005-08-11 08:24 AM




this was truly a gift

Bodger
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8 posted 2005-08-11 05:07 PM


Thanks Marsha;  thanks Lee

Bodger

Larry C
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9 posted 2005-08-11 08:40 PM


It's nice to have food for thought that actually makes you pause to sort things out and perhaps in the sorting gain new understandings otherwise elusive.

And welcome...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2005-08-12 09:07 AM


the last line sets the entire poem off perfectly.  Very well done.
Bodger
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11 posted 2005-08-12 04:24 PM


Larry C

Many thanks for your words

Gentle Spirit

Thank you

Bodger




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