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ice
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0 posted 2005-08-07 09:43 AM


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August breeze, is sand-storm wind
That dries the morning dew to dust.
So honey bees, drink hale and hearty
What decants from shallow cups-
Of wilted leaves, and grassy straws
Before all water left at dawn is lost.

Becoming thirsty, once again
By afternoon, when all moisture
Left on summer winds, sad to them
Seems gone... forevermore.

So they make a circle-ring (at two)
And sing, low buzzing songs
While lapping 'longside (wading)
cat-birds, finches-sparrows
That have come to drink and bathe,
Along my bird-baths concrete shore.

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2005-08-07 12:47 PM


watch them zip and sip
taste of honey on my lips
does dew hide inside?

miscellanea
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2 posted 2005-08-07 01:10 PM


Oh my goodness!  You painted this alive!  My family and I recently traveled to places like this!  (I was so excited when I read this I shared it with my husband.  He agreed; you described the land we traveled perfectly.)   Lots of layering here!  

       miscellanea

Enchantress
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3 posted 2005-08-07 01:32 PM


Wonderful writing Ford..
You have gifted us with some of the most wonderful writing here at Passions.
Thank you for yet another beauty.
Hugs~Nancy

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

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4 posted 2005-08-07 02:11 PM


Becoming thirsty, once again
By afternoon, when all moisture
Left on summer winds, sad to them
Seems gone... forevermore.

So they make a circle-ring (at two)
And sing, low buzzing songs
While lapping 'longside (wading)
cat-birds, finches-sparrows
That have come to drink and bathe,
Along my bird-baths concrete shore.

~*~

And they join these, my
dragon's fly...
and frog looks from pond
somewhat warily,
sitting green and pert,
studiously,
and knows the bee
from his stripe,
and knows the dragon,
from his hype...

but beware the horsefly,
who comes to sip,
not seeing green frog
from where he sits,
and zap! a movement
that no eye
might see...
and green frog winks,
grinning, smiling
at me.

~*~

Just as your poem made me smile...
I saw my own story just yesterday.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-07-2005 02:44 PM).]

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5 posted 2005-08-07 02:12 PM


lol at a sunny lady's frogwiseness
Earth Angel
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6 posted 2005-08-07 04:42 PM


Not only did I enjoy the body of yet another fine 'natural' poem, I  appreciated your tongue-in-cheek ending as well!  

~ "That have come to drink and bathe,
  Along my bird-baths concrete shore."

Love & Nature's Light,
Linda

ice
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7 posted 2005-08-07 07:30 PM


Kacy
Yes, a form of honey dew hides inside, I am sure of it...

Ms.Cellanea
"You painted this alive", what a nice comment, thanks for reading...

Nancy
Pip is a gift to me, I try hard to return the favor...By writing a lot about nature, which in my mind, contains all real beauty.

Kari
Love to see you reply, the addition is funny, love that part as well....
Yes, Kacy the sunny ladies "frogwiseness"
deserves a big LOL....

Linda
Love the words "fine" along with "natural" when it is applied to my poems....

Hugs all around....

--------------ice/ford



froggy
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8 posted 2005-08-07 09:26 PM


Ford,
You never cease to amaze me with your poetry.
Beautiful read.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

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9 posted 2005-08-08 12:33 PM


Tone, or imagery? Imagery, or tone? Heck, I dunno -- each of them is the best part of this poem!

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10 posted 2005-08-08 11:53 AM


August breeze, is sand-storm wind
That dries the morning dew to dust.
So honey bees, drink hale and hearty
What decants from shallow cups-
Of wilted leaves, and grassy straws
Before all water left at dawn is lost.

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I just love that verse...tis poetic gold when read aloud....
love the title too...
excellence from your pen poet sir.

I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain
I don't mind helping you out ...
But I want you to remember my name

Alanis

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