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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2005-08-06 06:49 PM



where two dark-winged angels meet

in the red of earth
two serpent trunks rise
then twist in greet of eucalypt

lines tell their age

and just behind the spread of leaves
a messy afro
springing here and there

peeps the moon

she lights the gravel white
in serpo creep
where two dark-winged angels meet
spangled-bound against the gum

and there I am

arms wrapped round knees to chest
my eyes against the sky
holding poesy in my hand

with you in focus.

230404 - repost and slight-ly edited


~i want for myself your trembling~

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2005-08-06 06:53 PM


smiling
and you always hold
poesy in your hands
and it oozes from lips
maybe even hips? LOL

Martie
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2 posted 2005-08-06 06:58 PM


I can see this, Maree...your poem is alive!  
Dark Angel
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3 posted 2005-08-06 06:58 PM


"maybe even hips"  lol.. Midnite? care to explain LOL

thanks for poesying, er moseying on in  

Hey Martie, thank you my honeysuckle, sorry i missed you, you snuck in as i was replying to Midnite up there



~i want for myself your trembling~

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4 posted 2005-08-06 07:20 PM


"and there I am

arms wrapped round knees to chest
my eyes against the sky
holding poesy in my hand

with you in focus."

Ahhhh..this is beautiful!!!
Much enjoyed Maree!!
Hugs YOU!

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2005-08-06 07:26 PM




yep...just that and this

'cause you already know.

Midnitesun
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6 posted 2005-08-06 10:28 PM


lol, you shoot straight from the hip...
(never mind, maybe this is one of those dumass colloquial expressions that doesn't translate well)
I read everything you write, yanno

miscellanea
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7 posted 2005-08-06 10:54 PM


I do believe Martie's right!  Your poem IS alive!  But then again, each poem you write evokes a familiar image!  Enjoyed the artistry in this...

         misc'e

vlraynes
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8 posted 2005-08-07 05:08 AM



Maree?...

This...
is beautiful...
and so are you...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

vandana
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9 posted 2005-08-07 10:53 AM


good read
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10 posted 2005-08-08 12:05 PM


I'm with Martie on this one -- it lives!

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wranx
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11 posted 2005-08-08 11:54 AM


So? I'll give it a slight bump.

It...You, a wonder.

littlewing
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12 posted 2005-08-08 11:03 PM


This reminded me of a darkly beautiful tune by System of a Down

http://www.systemofadown.com/

Check out the lyrics to "Chop Suey" from the album "Toxicity" . . .
you really must hear him sing to see what I mean .  . this song . . . it portrays what you have written here, in my mind.

This is brilliant, Maree.

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13 posted 2005-08-09 08:37 AM


you do bring life with your words Maree.
Miss you.  

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14 posted 2005-08-09 11:57 AM


Maree...indeed you bring this to life...with words and image....

In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes this art

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15 posted 2005-08-09 07:28 PM


sensuous
with a touch of moon
evokes the beauty of the dark

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