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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2005-08-02 06:39 AM


night fell
like a child
when the world is young
story tellers are great gods
pasting barnie band-aids on graves
with sweet flutes, of dante’s beatrice

forests honking their horns
while we grasp the golden ring
riding a wooden horse with no heart
recycled permission
shrouds the growing child

everyday sentences, dulls the pain
of a dangerous snake
as if mary dropped jesus
in mixed images
one for each element, like a maze
doing some prison shuffle
to suit each day

are there secrets to life?
growing in some sleepless night?
dancing in armageddon?
the one we've created?
where monsters of self-reproach
burn alive any deep hypnosis
of an
after death experience
and the light walking toward us?

like dusting towns that stick to your feet
selective listening
shifts bridges
paralyzing the left brain

rules may not always seem fair
but live due to reason

wearing a string of hope
with a dsl cable modem…
time tunnels scream
to any last life on earth

pandemics of the soul
spring forward
where daughters sob
entering a spirit world
life between now and then
becomes a perennial passage

pressing my nose against a
monday morning window
wondering, pondering….
why music wears black
will anyone know that it’s missing
to what seems to be a present
we should be alighned with Atlantis
but barbaric saliva wins

pushing my behavior
into the long dark place
until i become a blank gap
where no one knows my face

between form and wedlock
I vow to listen to plum sunsets
on my own
under god’s robe
in this
this
very small bend
in the road

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (08-02-2005 08:19 AM).]

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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
1 posted 2005-08-02 07:12 AM


between form and wedlock
I vow to listen to plum sunsets
on my own
under god’s robe
in this
this
very small bend
in the road


You listen well in your small bend there,ms. lee.......and from the small bend
comes a booming voice of clarity
*********************
dont always say it, sometimes just too
fogged in the head to really take it all in
and i hate to just give lip service comments
to such poignant pauses in this mad world
but i'm walking with you, if you allow me

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2005-08-02 07:42 AM


ms lee j..
now I know what I was reading
before I read you

enjoyed this one!!

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160
Missouri
3 posted 2005-08-02 08:17 AM


Amazing, simply amazing!  

Pat

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
4 posted 2005-08-02 09:10 AM


So many lines that I love!!

"night fell
like a child
when the world is young
story tellers are great gods
pasting barnie band-aids on graves"

"wearing a string of hope
with a dsl cable modem…"

"pressing my nose against a
monday morning window
wondering, pondering….
why music wears black"

"I vow to listen to plum sunsets
on my own"

I love it! And one of the things that is greatest about reading you, is you always make me think. Excellent poetry here

Always, Alyssa

Hupomeno.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
5 posted 2005-08-02 09:15 AM


"pressing my nose against a
monday morning window
wondering, pondering…."

~ Dang, girl! How perfect is that?!? ~ VERY!!!

Love your writing! ~ and YOU!

Linda


Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2005-08-02 09:34 AM


LeeJ
between form and wedlock
I vow to listen to plum sunsets
on my own
under god’s robe
in this
this
very small bend
in the road
Me too.
Good morning sweet.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
7 posted 2005-08-02 11:04 AM


"between form and wedlock
I vow to listen to plum sunsets
on my own
under god’s robe
in this
this
very small bend
in the road"

This piece of exquisite writing
will stay with me for a long long time..
Well done...well said Lee.
Heart Hugs~Nancy

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2005-08-02 11:25 AM



One of your best, Lee.

I was going to quote
some lines that captured
my attention, specifically...

thought it would be redundant
to put the whole poem in here
again...

So I'm just going to box my pens
and pencils away,
and spend the rest of this summer

reading Lee.

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
9 posted 2005-08-02 11:40 AM


I agree, LeeJ...this is one of your best, but they all are!  
froggy
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since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
10 posted 2005-08-02 09:27 PM


Beautifully said.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

marcel
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 660
az, usa
11 posted 2005-08-03 03:02 AM


creative and thought provoking---so many pieces to this complete masterpiece!
ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
12 posted 2005-08-03 05:01 AM


­"pushing my behavior
into the long dark place
until i become a blank gap
where no one knows my face"

Perhaps, no one on the street
Knows or recognizes your true face,
Or feels the pressure
That your crown of thorns
Is putting on your brain...
(Strangers to your poetry)

"like dusting towns that stick to your feet
selective listening
shifts bridges
paralyzing the left brain"

No one except your close family:
(Or perhaps some who feel
They understand your poetry)

"pandemics of the soul
spring forward
where daughters sob
entering a spirit world
life between now and then
becomes a perennial passage"

My assumption is, that you hide your grimace
Beneath a mask  to shield your privacy,
Trying to hide from the outside world.
But your mask is torn away
And the pain in your eyes
Is brought to your readers sight
By the beauty and complexity of your poetry;
If one reads down the lines, and thinks-
Slightly crossing their eyes.

*"We wear the mask that grins and lies,
It hides our cheeks and shades our eyes,--
This debt we pay to human guile;
With torn and bleeding hearts we smile,
And mouth with myriad subtleties."

(I have no right to assume anything,
I am only doing an interpretation here, Lee
Speaking of what this poem says to me personally.
Hope you understand, and are not insulted
Or upset in any way by my words)

----------------ice/ford
       ><>

(Paul Lawrence Dunbar- Excerpt- "We wear the mask")

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[This message has been edited by ice (08-03-2005 06:40 AM).]

MGROVES
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Posts 3802
california
13 posted 2005-08-03 05:40 AM


well this touches me very deeply~
one for my own self ~
more for the others that begged
to leave with me as they couldnt stand it
watching them cry, feeling their abandenment, as they was drug back in. and seeing no life in their little eyes as a child should have.  there was a lot of issures here, but this is what brought me to tears.

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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