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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2005-07-28 08:21 PM


The words become a focal point, an image wraps around.
The center forms a hole through which one feels they're sliding down.
It's tenuous , at best, this link between two different planes,
for nothing ever seems complete,we're left with what remains.

The bits and pieces that appear, hand strewn, along these lines,
may only skim the surface of the depths one would define.
An errant ray of hope persists, to light this dim recess,
illuminating different signs within this emptiness.

Where words become a focal point an image wraps around,
that never seem at all comlete, nor, even that profound.

© Copyright 2005 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-07-28 08:28 PM


Where words become a focal point an image wraps around,
that never seem at all complete, nor, even that profound.

wow, outstanding thoughts and write...

chuckling at your critique about retreading old tires...only cuz I'm working in the tire industry..

Andrew Scott
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2 posted 2005-07-29 05:15 PM


Doughnuts!  Now that's a hole I can really get into!  For what's a hole without one of these delicious frames to surround it?  "Nothing," I say.  So make my hole a delicious chocolate glazed.  And by the way... Got milk?

Oh, and one more thing... Have you ever wondered what the whole hole looks like?  Think about it.  

I still love your style Doc.  Peace.

Martie
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3 posted 2005-07-29 05:30 PM


Doc

"The bits and pieces that appear, hand strewn, along these lines,
may only skim the surface of the depths one would define."

I wish I had written this poem!!  

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2005-07-29 07:58 PM


Where words become a focal point an image wraps around,
that never seem at all comlete, nor, even that profound


says it all

* you left out a "p" in complete
M

Larry C
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5 posted 2005-07-29 09:11 PM


Doc!
I'd quote my favorite part but see no point to pasting the entire write into my reply. Sorry I haven't read you in so long espicially now that I am reminded how much I enjoy your writing. This is fabulous. Thank you sir for sharing.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

wandering glider
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aloft
6 posted 2005-07-29 10:01 PM


A poet's poem.
Nice one, Sir.
Glad I stopped by for a read tonight.

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