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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2005-07-28 01:39 AM


In this boredome you settle down
whine and wail
it wont always go your way
lost and uncontrollable
every ounce of blanketed pride
you drown beneath the sea
a chaos of memories

left of the middle
no where to go
settling into reality
cry out loud
scream and shout
lost in a daydream
chasing a false destiny

im lost in my journey
i took the wrong turn
who do i wanna be
just me
who do i do when i want to be
anything but me

© Copyright 2005 Kellie M. Cantrell - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2005-07-28 02:25 AM


I can totally relate.  Its sorta hard sometimes critiquing the actual poetry because of the message.  Especially with phrases like "wrong turn."  Can so relate.  God bless.  Nice write.

-GIS

Romans 8:28 "And we know that God causes everything to work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to his purposes

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2005-07-28 10:02 AM


amazing read, this soft thought provoking spread of theme....
Bodger
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since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
3 posted 2005-07-28 05:15 PM


a chaos of hide came to my mind at one point

I really like to read the undercurrent as I think you are just showing the rough sea

Bodger

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
4 posted 2005-07-28 08:44 PM


"left of the middle
no where to go
settling into reality
cry out loud
scream and shout
lost in a daydream
chasing a false destiny"

"...im lost in my journey
i took the wrong turn"

Many poets have taken this road...The one Frost took, that was "less traveled by"

enjoyed
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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2005-07-28 08:48 PM


Kellie  

"im lost in my journey
i took the wrong turn"

I think that many of us have made this very same wrong turn.  Hugs to you sweet gal.

I refuse to make plans past this moment in time....

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