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Open Poetry #36

Nirvana

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 2005-07-23 02:54 PM

This night
let me take you
beyond the realm of sense,
let me lead you to Nirvana
within

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2005-07-23 02:59 PM

E X Q U I S I T E !!

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

2 posted 2005-07-23 10:13 PM

this doesn't read forced. sometimes, you can tell a cinquain from far because you sense how forceful the author tried to arrange his syllables in place but this isn't definitely one of the lesser pieces.

great job!

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

3 posted 2005-07-24 12:35 PM

much said while saying little, I admire that

The Mongrel cat came home, Holding half a head proceeded to show it off to all his new found friends

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2005-07-24 05:13 PM

very very nice!

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

5 posted 2005-07-24 07:21 PM

Que hermosa chicita! Me encanta su poema. Puedes darme sopresas con sus palabras...siempre. Muy bonita!

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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