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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2005-07-23 04:23 AM


I could peek
a lift of veil
as surely as a fingernail
searches for an edge of scab
itching curiosity
in garner of the leverage
of what lies
beneath the skin
confessional of sin
but then?

I could bleed to death.

so I

allow devout deformity-
scars at times
becomingly
billowing the papacy
of things I shouldn't seek

and that

is all I really need to know.


© Copyright 2005 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Alicat
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1 posted 2005-07-23 04:29 AM


I'm reminded of the apocryphal story of the French monk who prayed and prayed to know the true name of God.  One night his prayers were answered.  Then he spent the rest of his life praying to forget.
serenity blaze
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2 posted 2005-07-23 05:05 AM


*smile*

I don't wanna know either.

I've got the kind of mind that would immediately say that name backwards, because it's precisely what you ain't supposed t'do!





Get some sleep bro. I ain't about to undo all of creation.

zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

ice
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3 posted 2005-07-23 07:39 AM


There it is again, that grit, that gritty
selection of words, coase as if sanded with 60
grit sandpaper...across the grain!

But if a reader looks close they can see it is polished to smooth finish with 220.....

Ever do any carpentry, Serenity?

enjoyed
------------ice/ford
   ><>

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2005-07-23 07:44 AM


serenity,
I too love to paddle my feet in the running brook.

Ceinwyn
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5 posted 2005-07-23 11:53 AM


Lemme ponder on this a bit more...I keep flashbacking to when I was 6 and stuck my finger in a light socket...I tend to do things I shouldnt Need I say more...lovely envoking poem here..tho doubtful it was supposed to envoke such a dorky confession LOL

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2005-07-23 12:23 PM


itching curiosity


someone once told me recently I was a bit too curious and you know what..that describes it perfectly


M

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2005-07-23 01:30 PM


I could peek
a lift of veil
as surely as a fingernail
searches for an edge of scab
itching curiosity
in garner of the leverage
of what lies
beneath the skin
confessional of sin
but then?

I could bleed to death.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Oh..but Id read ya till I bled out me mothy eyes.

I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain
I don't mind helping you out
But I want you to remember my name

Alanis

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Gaia
8 posted 2005-07-23 01:35 PM


evil grin here
I say it backwards all the time
and don't have the foggiest idea
of who s(he) really is

littlewing
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9 posted 2005-07-23 03:58 PM


of course this somehow reminded me of being a teenager and being forced to go to confession in school and sitting in that ole hot stinky confessional waiting for the hand of God to come crashing down upon me . . .

No thank you - I beat myself up quite enough.

*grin*

Kaoru
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10 posted 2005-07-23 05:16 PM


I could bleed to death.

so I

allow devout deformity-
Nothing better than abnormalities.

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2005-07-24 02:41 AM


i Echo Kaoru....

"Nothing better than abnormalities"

*grin* indeed.

mxx

take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter.

~neruda~

Patricia
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12 posted 2005-07-24 07:38 AM


You are simply amazing. This is the third poem of yours I have read this morn...and now I sit in awe.  

I knew there was a good reason I was called back to this place this week.

Patricia

Sunshine
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13 posted 2005-07-24 10:39 AM


ice, I think serenity's works are always works in progress - like a good carpenter, she goes back in to polish things so danged smooth...that she slips right into your soul.
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14 posted 2005-07-24 10:43 AM


I like the way you talk -- no varnish allowed. I'm going to be reading much more of you from now on.... or from two-weeks-from-now on, since I'm going to be away from all computers, slouching on a beach in Maui.....

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serenity blaze
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15 posted 2005-07-24 03:02 PM


whimpering...Maui?

sigh

(Bring back some Wowee. )

thanks for reading, I'm going to go glare back at the sun.

This is decidedly not witch weather.

BeWitched
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16 posted 2005-07-24 05:39 PM


Wow!
Juju
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17 posted 2005-07-24 06:50 PM


Yes it is thoughs imperfections that make us beautiful and hose perfections that drive us to madness

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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