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Sunshine
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0 posted 2005-07-22 11:41 PM



Of Adore

You,

you are teasing with me, like
you did, before

those stories I heard?
Are stories I store…

it was said,
as if a chore,
She was this, and all that much
more…

SHE, it was said
with some shaking of heads…

wore Black…and scared me…
almost out  of breath…

some tried to say,
You scared me to death…

and it was, in that web of sublime
in that fine moment
in that moment of time

when you must have thought,
and you truly thought…

BREATHE!

and instilled in me
a life of

BELIEVE….

and it was this,
and all so much more….

that kept you within this…
and that time
of adore.

"There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron

© Copyright 2005 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2005-07-22 11:53 PM


"adore, more, believe, breathe"  Some very special and important words in this poem, sissie.  And, as you are, beautiful!  
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2 posted 2005-07-22 11:57 PM


I love the loose rhyme scheme you used in this piece and the presention...not to mention the message Lovely, lovely work
Ruth

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3 posted 2005-07-23 12:10 PM


Oh Oh, YAY! perfect rhyme, perfect flow....

lovin it Sunshinygirl...all of it and you.

a

Mxx

take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter.

~neruda~

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4 posted 2005-07-23 12:12 PM


inhaling before I sigh...



(I'd hyperventilate if I didn't)

love the lady love

SmartChick
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5 posted 2005-07-23 11:05 AM


Very nice, Karilea. To be able to believe, I think, is a good thing.
Patricia
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6 posted 2005-07-24 07:46 AM


I read this a few times because (as you know) I just ADORE flow and use of rhyme.  But too, I believe there is much more in these words.

Patricia


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7 posted 2005-07-25 01:55 PM


It is marvelous to read of those who inspire you still.  Well done.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Marilyn
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8 posted 2005-07-25 01:58 PM


You always were good but since I have been away from this site you have become great. I loved every word, every beat of this.

Marilyn.

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Canada eh.
9 posted 2005-07-25 01:59 PM


Wonderful...how I admire your talent.
Hugs YOU!

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

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