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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-07-22 09:25 PM



On the sidelines of my dreams I rest
while the orchestra of memory seems to play
from deeper in the mists
than I choose to see,
among fugues and nocturnes floating endlessly,
though never written down
as shibbolethic phrases;
your’s is the need for adoration
with supporting dialogue selectively chosen,
woven loosely left untied,
living twisted thoughts
stepping on each other’s threads
like shekels melted to each other,
left neglected in the fires of an empty soul
seared on craven coals of ego’s lost desires;
I feel your struggles tangled in the netting
of endless naked need for praise and worship,
poorly phrased in broken stolen thoughts
so badly shaded, parched and cracked,
and by far too many times translated.

©2005 by icebox

© Copyright 2005 icebox - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-07-22 10:07 PM


Alas, alas, I know it's true of me--

"Worship me, dammit--now go away!"

(I've been told I could get paid good money for the attitude alone.)



I've missed you though, dawlin'.



Sometimes I suspect you write on sandpaper, but then, it works out fine for me, with all my rough edges.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2005-07-22 10:29 PM


You may speak to many...
but even more, listen.

Martie
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3 posted 2005-07-22 10:41 PM


icebox

"stepping on each other’s threads
like shekels melted to each other,"

I'm probably wrong, but this sounds like it could be fun.  

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2005-07-22 10:50 PM


omg...Martie? I just told him that via e mail!

not even kidding, psychic sis...

lawsy dawlin' C, you do have your hands full!


iliana
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5 posted 2005-07-23 01:45 AM


Couldn't help but think of famous divas when I read this.  But then I read it again, and began to think about it alot.  It seems so true of most women of my generation, that we were reared in such a fashion, to seek approval.  Your description of this from a metaphysical standpoint is, for lack of a better word, stunning!   ....jo
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2005-07-23 01:24 PM


interesting title & write poet sir...much to absorb here and even more to read between the lines me thinks...

we each take away our own insights from reading poetry...often not even close to what the poet intended..but thats the beauty & burden of the written word..

as I read this, the old Carly Simon song came to mind--"your so vain( you probably think this song is about you) and also it reminded me of when I first joined pips, all wide eyed and naive, eagerly praising and worshiping, and some of the laureates warned me of the poets ego, both the fragile and the insationable... I couldnt understand their jaded views then... but I do now....

thanks for this view from your eyes.

I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain
I don't mind helping you out
But I want you to remember my name

Alanis

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Gaia
7 posted 2005-07-23 01:33 PM


I can only add to what the other fine readers have said

damn, but you cut right through to the bones of reality

littlewing
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8 posted 2005-07-23 03:54 PM


thats why I loves ya icey
you hurl truth . . .
in the sweetest possible way

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9 posted 2005-07-24 10:47 AM


I understand this much better than I want to.

As I told another friend recently, it is Visibility Minus sometimes -- when there's no possibility of looking outward through that fog (or there's no point in trying), and the only possiblity of vision lies within.

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Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2005-07-24 11:22 AM


icebox,
Looking down from the cloud of why
I see the whale profundity pass by.

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