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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-07-21 07:14 AM



we were both taxies before
hauling bodies in our empty
to destinations unknown
I guess we just liked the driving
or the pickups and drop-offs
for the views of what was coming
or who was leaving
and an occasional stop there
to refuel our buck stop buicks

now tomorrow is an oatmeal sky
with a melted butter moon
and cereal suggestions
mush mouthed in wind
that gums the trees
with toothless appreciation
nursing the nipples
of a sand bosomed sea
for salty satisfaction

shall I give you this back drop
of cardboard clotheslines
and a flashlight without batteries
will you dance for me
and make your skin perspire
before you wear my expressions
perhaps as something friendly
you finally realize was yours
just for not asking for more

than a shoplift slight of handful
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2005-07-21 08:40 AM



Oatmeal and
melted butter...
a favorite treat...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2005-07-21 08:43 AM


shall I give you this back drop
of cardboard clotheslines
and a flashlight without batteries
will you dance for me
and make your skin perspire
before you wear my expressions
perhaps as something friendly
you finally realize was yours
just for not asking for more

"than a shoplift slight of handful"

the last line speaking volumns
like a great orange moon rising...

loved this

Morning DS



Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2005-07-21 09:07 AM


Dark,
This was a toothpick after breakfast. Enjoyed

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
4 posted 2005-07-21 09:14 AM


ditto to seymour

but from soup to nuts......you are the
decandence of culinary aventure

SEA
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Posts 22676
with you
5 posted 2005-07-21 09:32 AM


"will you dance for me
and make your skin perspire
before you wear my expressions
perhaps as something friendly
you finally realize was yours
just for not asking for more"

I liked this part lots

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2005-07-21 11:07 AM


now tomorrow is an oatmeal sky
with a melted butter moon

and cereal suggestions
mush mouthed in wind
that gums the trees
with toothless appreciation
nursing the nipples
of a sand bosomed sea
for salty satisfaction

shall I give you this back drop
of cardboard clotheslines
and a flashlight without batteries
will you dance for me
and make your skin perspire
before you wear my expressions
perhaps as something friendly
you finally realize was yours
just for not asking for more

than a shoplift slight of handful
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

yep...your poetic mind is too cool for school

I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain
I don't mind helping you out
But I want you to remember my name

Alanis

Martie
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7 posted 2005-07-21 04:29 PM


DS

Amazing imagery throughout!!  

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

8 posted 2005-07-21 06:57 PM





Indigo
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since 2001-05-17
Posts 602

9 posted 2005-07-22 02:32 PM


A trace of melancholy becomes you, D. But since when did you not want someone to ask for more? *weg*

You just keep getting better...

Indigo

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
10 posted 2005-07-22 03:50 PM


ms sunshine..you make ihop seem a castle place, thanks lady

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ms Lee J thanks lady friend..

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sir sy, humble thanks guy!!

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ms inky..you adventure me with your replies
thank you babe

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ms suesea, it is a naughty part, but it sure looks good on you..thanks lady

_____________

ms janet, I knew you would look at the sky here, was hoping to see it in your eyes, thanks lady friend

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ms martie, thank you little neighbor

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gs, thanks for the thumb..wink

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ms indi... melons?  where?...thank you lady friend...and there is always more for you ..

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