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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-07-20 02:34 PM


I feel this burning
in my chest
constantly yearning
there is no rest

from this desire;

I seek to find
the power,     the key
to unlock my mind
so I might think
in different train
of thought
and use these lessons
that life has taught

I NEED to keep myself
from standing still
to lose, not again
my own will
while holding close
the belief
that love can be real

and that my heart
may someday feel


      anything other than
this burning
in my chest

      something more...

           than this emptiness.


Give me your heart
Make it real
Or else forget about it...Santana

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with you
1 posted 2005-07-20 02:50 PM


whoa, Donna...
this is awesome!

The One & Only
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2 posted 2005-07-20 03:00 PM


I like that!!
Sunshine
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3 posted 2005-07-20 03:44 PM


I NEED to keep myself
from standing still
to lose, not again
my own will
while holding close
the belief
that love can be real

and that my heart
may someday feel


~*~

little girl?

You did good!


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Gaia
4 posted 2005-07-20 04:00 PM


am feeling this one, gentle one
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2005-07-20 04:06 PM


Oooh love this one Donna...
Excellent write dear one.

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2005-07-21 07:50 AM


thanks all.  

Give me your heart
Make it real
Or else forget about it...Santana

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In Your Poetic Mind
7 posted 2005-09-21 09:28 AM


and that my heart
may someday feel

      anything other than
this burning
in my chest

      something more...

           than this emptiness.''''


DAMN girl...you know I understand this....sigh....luv ya!


BTW..I LOVE your new pic....!

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8 posted 2005-09-21 11:32 AM


Donna...This is so emotional, almost like a plea from your heart. I really enjoyed this tender poem...Paul

Not sure if you wanted any suggestions for a title, but I would call it " Heart Strings "

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

LeeJ
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9 posted 2005-09-21 11:43 AM


Donna!  Love your new picture, just look at the light in your eyes...

I NEED to keep myself
from standing still
to lose, not again
my own will
while holding close
the belief
that love can be real

it not only can be but is...and it's within
the core of your being

Beautiful write, as always

thank you

A mind is like a home, furnished by its owner, so if one's life is cold and bare he can blame none but himself.
Louis L'Amour, 'Bendigo Shafter'

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Margherita
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10 posted 2005-09-21 02:48 PM


Now, that you are aware of your heart's emptiness, it's ready to be filled.

This poem developed just to the right point.

Beautiful work!

Love,
Margherita

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Canada eh.
11 posted 2005-09-21 03:11 PM



WOW!!  Just popped in to say how much I LOVE your new pic sweet Donna!!!

Martie
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12 posted 2005-09-21 03:37 PM


Donna...it sounds like you are growing...and that sometimes hurts.  Love the look of your new picture!!  
Angelheart
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13 posted 2005-09-21 04:16 PM


This is good..   and i felt this myself..  heartfelting to me indeed.. thanks for sharing.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

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14 posted 2005-09-21 06:51 PM


You ladies and gentlemen really know how to make a girl and

THANK YOU!

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