navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #36 » Rights of the Child
Open Poetry #36
Post A Reply Post New Topic Rights of the Child Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2005-07-19 12:07 PM


is the deep chill wearing work cloths?
nodding permission
like a hissing sound, deafening?
i am the door, which celebrates my father’s
decision…which i "can" open or close…

turning silence, between my fingers
allows the volume to complain
capping old spice
watching the face of throw away plates

toasting marshmallows to players
with a great big L across their foreheads
lay a strap of years across my back,
struck by the lightening of loud applause
on our sofa where crippling polio sat

shadowy rooms, wrapped in tears
step stool parents who did the distance
saran wrap locks in freshness
leftovers became innovative

a poster child…became
court room drama uncrated
by proof of soft white hands, while
judge judy played checkers in a dimly lit tavern
the cash register’s door creaks
an aura of power
a broken piece of some puzzle of life

reminding me of the popping muscles of
another poor bastard who bites the dust
like a coming of age odyssey
being the fool of my mother’s hunger
it wasn’t his month
to be a delivery man, for stolen moments
i can see him waving, in his navy blues
climbing up some ladder of
free and clear with alibis up the gazoo

who knew about the gourd
his estranged daughter grew
every summer and every fall
waiting for him to open that door
and challenge an unbearably powerful solution

i wonder what his last thoughts were
when death came to knock on his door?

and that silly little event, that conveys me to him
becoming friends of the dead for life
with time off, on weekends & holidays
memory never fails to remember
and this one, I’ve decided to keep
slow cooked on the back burner…
just to remind me, how much I love children
and their right to expect a good role model

sobering is the mourner,
the one who was to him,
ironic and fictitious
long golden curls and bobbie socks
killed in a car wreck…his

he did the best he could, or knew how to do...
it just wasn’t enough...

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (07-20-2005 06:26 AM).]

© Copyright 2005 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Juju
Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
1 posted 2005-07-19 01:18 PM


wow

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
2 posted 2005-07-19 01:25 PM


Lee~

*sigh* ... there are layers and layers to this penning~

And this -
'memory never fails to remember'
Classic~

Poignant piecing of poetic ponder~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2005-07-19 06:07 PM


Nice writing...James
miscellanea
Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060
OH
4 posted 2005-07-20 12:11 PM


LeeJ.,
   I can't tell you how this affected me.  Bitter, I suppose.  This is very well conveyed, leaving me with an emptiness, a bit of hurt.
   I will be forever in awe of how you conjure up the imagery that you do.  You pace it so quickly that I am taken away with the events.
             miscellanea

garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
5 posted 2005-07-20 05:17 PM


LeeJ, this poem really touched my heart.
Thanks so much for sharing with us. You
write your thoughts so well that I feel I'm
right there looking at whatever you're writing about.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

6 posted 2005-07-20 06:46 PM


"i am the door, which celebrates my father’s
decision…"

I agree with Marge, because I nod, how you do layer! and each layer is so multi-faceted, Lee, I'm often left feeling inept to understand.

Your passion is undeniable and I admire that so very much, lady. And as I've said before, sometimes I don't "get" it as a whole, but I read everything you post, because EVERY time you do, there are several lines I wished I'd written.

You serve up 12 course meals, Lee. And it takes more than one reading for me to digest, but it is all delicious.

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #36 » Rights of the Child

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary