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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
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0 posted 2005-07-19 07:22 AM


I looked out of your eye's in
windows of some lime pie
driving your mind by
in daydream limo pretention

where are your fingers then
when you fold the pages
of a lady's hand's edges
into prayer book bound blind

and ignore the bee stings
of a lover's kneading eyes
inking your shoulders behind
with the drumbeat time to rhyme

a panting breath kind of time
with insatiable duration
and the distant high of shy
that has no need to hide behind

the cellophane of the suer's cloud  


_____________
dark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-19-2005 09:05 AM).]

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with you
1 posted 2005-07-19 09:14 AM


"and ignore the bee stings
of a lover's kneading eyes
inking your shoulders behind
with the drumbeat time to rhyme

a panting breath kind of time
with insatiable duration
and the distant high of shy
that has no need to hide behind"


you always amaze me with the way you see things, and how you express yourself...

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2005-07-19 09:22 AM



Nothing clichéd here...
but, it does click!

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2005-07-20 01:53 PM


interesting view here D - very vivid imagery in my mind's eye -

  S

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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4 posted 2005-07-27 08:13 AM


click... it does indeed...

always a wonderful and interesting write from you Mr Dark...Enjoyed.

and now it's time for another scotch.

Mxx

take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter.

~neruda~

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2005-07-27 08:19 AM


and ignore the bee stings
of a lover's kneading eyes
inking your shoulders behind
with the drumbeat time to rhyme

a panting breath kind of time
with insatiable duration
and the distant high of shy
that has no need to hide behind


  lovin it...

Give me your heart
Make it real
Or else forget about it...Santana

MGROVES
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california
6 posted 2005-07-27 08:35 AM


love the way you use your
words~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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