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Sunshine
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0 posted 2005-07-17 11:08 PM




Fostering Déjà's View

Across the plains of planes
thoughts roaming, fast as trains
to come onto a whistle’s stop
for a memory they would drop

And you experience déjà vu

Walk into a grand old home
know the corridors which to roam
reach around a wall, touch a light
switch it on, candelabra bright

And you experience déjà vu

Look into an old man’s eyes
where the pale blue may realize
he’s looked at you in the past
when your future was first cast

And you experience déjà vu

Hear the voices on the wind
think of grandparents once again
in the light see visions long gone
as you step forth, forward and on

And you experience déjà vu

When you look into a mirror
seeing not you, but someone dearer
in that moment, it’s quite clear
the me you see is very near

Experiencing déjà vu

When I hear your I love you
and I experience the things you do
even though we’ve never met
for I’m not born, not just yet

Experience déjà vu!



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01.25.01


© Copyright 2005 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2005-07-17 11:13 PM


Sissie

"when I hear your I love you
and I experience the things you do
even though we’ve never met
for I’m not born, not just yet

Experience déjà vu!"

I love all of this, but especially the last part quoted above.  

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2 posted 2005-07-17 11:52 PM


~smiling here~

Tim
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3 posted 2005-07-18 12:15 PM


It's a pleasure
to read a treasure
that's in rhyme,
It's not a crime
Although free verse
is my one curse,
It is your prize
Now this suprise,
It's nice to see
That you can be
A rhymer too,
a big yahoo...

I apologize for the reply Sunshine, but it has been a long weekend, but I truly enjoyed the poem as I did Miss Emily...

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4 posted 2005-07-18 12:29 PM


cute

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

iliana
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5 posted 2005-07-18 12:38 PM


Sunshine, this is MARVELOUS!!!  You wrote so beautifully of one of my favorite topics!  love you, SIL   ......jo
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6 posted 2005-07-19 01:36 AM


I'm sure you don't have to guess that I LOVE this one!!!

cause, I do!

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7 posted 2005-07-19 06:41 AM


Very good writing here K....is it Deja vu that you have written another great poem.?.No it's not... you do it all the time..thank you for this..

Goldenrose.

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8 posted 2005-07-19 07:12 AM


Déjà's View
Lady, could we ever have an interesting conversation on this one...would love to share thoughts and listen...hugs, and thank you for an interesting read (wink)

Have a wonderful day!

JesusChristPose
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9 posted 2005-07-21 12:14 PM


This happened to me upon my retirement from the navy and coming back home to what I left behind after 23-40 years. Well written and enjoyed!
Patricia
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10 posted 2005-07-22 02:09 PM


déjà vu! Yep, I am smiling now!

By the way, you've got mail.  

Patricia

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11 posted 2005-07-22 02:15 PM


Oooh yes...perfectly charming.
Lovely this..
lovely you!
Hugs~Nancy

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

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12 posted 2005-07-22 08:44 PM


can you say goosebumps? this was sweet and boy do I ever know about deja vu loved this

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13 posted 2005-07-25 01:39 PM


For those who have eyes to see
What isn't visible to me
I clap with standing praise
For you and your writing ways.

Very charming.  I agree with Martie on the last stanza. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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14 posted 2005-07-27 02:55 AM


great one~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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15 posted 2005-08-08 09:09 PM


This is so cool, Sunshine!  Those moments!

miscellanea

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16 posted 2005-08-09 11:53 AM


hugsss Sunny Lady....this is lovely...

In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes this art

Tequilia_Sunrise
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17 posted 2005-12-16 12:46 PM


I love it!
Honeybunch
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18 posted 2005-12-16 02:28 AM


Great writing on a subject that fascinates me but Martie says it best so I'll just ditto her.

Susan Caldwell
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19 posted 2005-12-16 07:59 AM


Loved this Karilea!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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20 posted 2005-12-16 08:47 AM


I have experienced this thing called Deja Vu
possibly a time or two....   
Enjoyed this Sunshiney one.

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