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Open Poetry #36

storm

sunsetgun
Junior Member

since 2005-07-17

Posts 21

0 posted 2005-07-17 02:28 PM

  I have become ethereal
A dark and ominous cloud

  a river I will cry for you,
beneath my grief to drowned

  or a single teardrop ,
to annoint this hallowed ground.

  My voice blows coldly over you
a mighty rushing sound

   but no words to give you comfort
for my heart holds nothing now.

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2005-07-17 03:55 PM

Such an emotional storm flows through these words making the reader share your feelings...well done...*hugs*

sunsetgun
Junior Member

since 2005-07-17

Posts 21

2 posted 2005-07-17 05:09 PM

thanks for your kind words.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2005-07-17 06:57 PM

now that's what I call
a cold chilling wind

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

4 posted 2005-07-18 06:43 PM

wow

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

adagio
Member

since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

5 posted 2005-07-18 06:57 PM

Well,
You really have set a mood here.
very well written.

lyricpoet
Member

since 2005-07-16

Posts 199
NY, USA

6 posted 2005-07-18 08:42 PM

nice write

sunsetgun
Junior Member

since 2005-07-17

Posts 21

7 posted 2005-07-19 10:28 AM

you are all far to kind : )

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2005-07-19 02:01 PM

Have I welcomed you as of yet? If not, I beg your forgiveness...

and welcome to pip!

I really loved this piece and will look for you...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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