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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2005-07-16 04:39 PM




Faith on pause
I fumble
more often
than walk
these four walls
devouring my sanity
I forget how to breathe
when I
find myself
craving
answers
like chocolate
sweet on my tongue
smooth to the touch of my lips
just like

your kiss...

spiderwebs
cluttering
my perspective

I trace
the stars
with eyes shut

I thirst...
ache...
to touch
the answers
suspended
from orion's belt...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2005 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-07-16 04:56 PM


Hey K, it's been awhile.

Your first line had me nodding, and the rest so aptly portrayed the growing pains of the human spirit I had to stop and wince.

This is a lovely thing, lady, and it's lovelier to read you again.

Ceinwyn
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2 posted 2005-07-16 05:05 PM


Karen thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed my spur of the moment rant and rave.  I'm glad it made sense to someone

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2005-07-17 12:32 PM


Enjoyed....James
passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-07-17 07:58 AM


wow...this is a cool write

well done

iliana
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5 posted 2005-07-19 12:58 PM


Ceinwyn, this is so well said!  
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2005-07-19 02:08 PM


"I fumble
more often
than walk'

dang, isn't that the truth..

talent is just spilling forth today.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Sunshine
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7 posted 2005-07-19 04:37 PM



This? Is a rant?
Strange...

I would have called it love.

And very precious in its light.


Earth Angel
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8 posted 2005-07-19 06:20 PM


"I thirst...
ache...
to touch
the answers
suspended
from orion's belt..."

I loved that ending! ~ and everything that came before it!!!

~ Kristen, you have penned a very sweet and starry love poem. Stars

It was wonderful to read you again!

Love & Star Light,
Linda

littlewing
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9 posted 2005-07-20 01:46 AM


from Orion's belt . . .
I love that . . .

miss you Kris . . .

garysgirl
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10 posted 2005-07-20 05:07 PM


I forget how to breathe
when I
find myself
craving
answers
like chocolate
sweet on my tongue
smooth to the touch of my lips
just like

your kiss...



I love this part and know how it feels!!
Hugs,



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