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Elven Angel
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since 2005-07-14
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0 posted 2005-07-15 03:57 AM


How can I love you
when you can't be mine?
Why does you smile
erase all my frowns?
Your eyes are so deep
and dark like the night,
your lips oh so sweet
like time spent in love.
My cries, oh darling
when will you be mine?
When will your heart
become one with mine?
Oh I wish, my dear darling
that you could be mine,
your heart intertwined
like rope in my net.
I love you, my darling,
your smile and your mind.
Your eyes shine so brightly,
stare deep into mine.
How I wish you could see
my own aching heart,
it burns for you darling
why won't you be mine?
My darling I wish you could
know how I feel,
my heart fir to burst
with love for you now.
How I wish you could be
right here by my side
forever in love,
just you and I.


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Goldenrose
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1 posted 2005-07-15 04:59 AM


Love with depth...could feel the passion...

Goldenrose.

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2 posted 2005-07-15 10:31 AM


the ache is felt in this for sure...enjoyed the read
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2005-07-16 12:13 PM


Hoping for good things...James
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4 posted 2005-07-16 04:28 AM


a good write
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5 posted 2005-07-16 05:59 AM


yes a very good write

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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6 posted 2005-12-26 12:53 PM


high powered poem elven
~wolfy

poe
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7 posted 2005-12-26 01:35 AM


Good poem, it could use some touching up as far as spelling. I do know what it is like tough forever trying to get your words out never worrying about those extra or forgotten letters. Other then that the words flowed brilliantly.

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Today never ends for those who live it.

iliana
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8 posted 2005-12-26 03:10 AM


Oh, I do know the ache of this one.  
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