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evomx5
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since 2005-07-11
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Atlanta, GA

0 posted 2005-07-14 06:43 AM



Listening to the rain outside, up against the glass
I saw a shadow in the hall, I saw it walk right past
It made its way into the room where I last saw your face
The last time there was laughter in this God forsaken place

My glass of wine fell to the floor, my heart began to pound
I listened hard to hear your voice but there was not a sound
I clear my eyes and look around to see if it was you
You’re standing right in front of me, I don’t know what to do

I try to talk, no words come out, my tears they start to fall
You’re looking at me longingly, your name I try to call
You do not speak, you do not laugh, you do not even cry
I look into your deep blue eyes and try to ask you why

Why you left me like you did, and what am I to do
This life I live is not a life, especially without you
The tears I cry, I cry for you, it’s so hard to go on
Just knowing that you’ll not be back, you are forever gone

A lightning flash, a clash of thunder bring me to my senses
I'm all alone without you here and utterly defenseless
The day I laid you in the ground my life was buried too
It won’t be long, you have my word, I’m coming back to you.

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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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1 posted 2005-07-14 09:51 AM


The phantoms sometimes visit me as well.

The emotion in this was vivid. I saw it and I felt it.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-07-14 11:07 AM


me thinks you write songs, and would so long to hear this to music...excellent prose...thank you for sharing
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3 posted 2005-07-14 12:30 PM


Thank you for posting this one here, I remember finding this at a time when someone was lost forever, and feeling as your character.  I had hoped time would change that feeling, time doesn't always heal. You capture moments in time so well.  

    
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passing shadows
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4 posted 2005-07-15 03:59 AM


oh my

how touching

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