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from where the stirring begins |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Even a white moon can not conceal a hurting heart so I let the light ride my palms & blue walls or from where ever the stirring began When I forget to cry and love lies sleeping in dreams of gold just moving in pieces running through my head to fall into you when you go out blue for the heart Fear is naming love, being scared to fall through life learning nothing could it be that complex or is it that simple? Laying amidst silence on edges of reality I touch the water crying wondering, if the skies open would I recognize myself? will I again notice that sometimes beauty is the rain on my shoulders? {and I cried for you I dared to plead} but there is no rain, no dawn The bending of flowers can not be stopped and I await Aprils rain to soak the green and live in unity Perhaps I am too abstract for your document of understanding, maybe you prefer a bigger gift touching your hands Stillness settles watching butterflies tap glass I listened from the room, you were the last word, ecstasy breaking free between daylight & midnight empty In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* have mercy............ Lawdy Lady L... I'll be back.   How about me not blaming you for everything |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Me too, too many good parts in this poem, it needs a good workout before I can even say what I am thinking. See you back here soon. Oh mercy sakes Lauren! You were always so good , but now all your work has become simply exquisite. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Perhaps I am too abstract for your document of understanding, ~*~ But, Lauren... you're a woman... of course you are! And I can only echo the lady poets above... I'll be back to revisit this lovely... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Even a white moon can not conceal a hurting heart so I let the light ride my palms & blue walls or from where ever the stirring began Good grief that image is absolutely beautiful, and I felt a flutter of heart in those lines. Fear is naming love, being scared to fall through life learning nothing could it be that complex or is it that simple? Holy stark awakening! Could it be that simple? A lesson from the eyes of green here me thinks. Stillness settles watching butterflies tap glass I listened from the room, you were the last word, ecstasy breaking free between daylight & midnight empty Oh my, oh my! I am speechless on these lines, but I know a certain moth that won't be, good thing she can speak for us all |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Fear is naming love, being scared to fall through life learning nothing could it be that complex or is it that simple?" WOW....so many good lines! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
.... complex or simple ... if only it could be that easy! sentiments of a hurting heart within a broken moon .... (sigh) * S |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Even a white moon can not conceal a hurting heart so I let the light ride my palms & blue walls or from where ever the stirring began When I forget to cry and love lies sleeping in dreams of gold ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Fear is naming love, being scared to fall through life learning nothing could it be that complex or is it that simple? Laying amidst silence on edges of reality I touch the water crying wondering, if the skies open would I recognize myself? will I again notice that sometimes beauty is the rain on my shoulders? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The bending of flowers can not be stopped ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Perhaps I am too abstract for your document of understanding, maybe you prefer a bigger gift touching your hands Stillness settles watching butterflies tap glass I listened from the room, you were the last word, ecstasy breaking free between daylight & midnight ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ what could a mere moth ever say that would do justice to this exquisite write... so so lovely girlie... I just wanna know where you learned to write poetry on butterfly wings. *S* this muse is poetic gold dear poetess L...pure wing dust gold.... How about me not blaming you for everything |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
" {and I cried for you I dared to plead} but there is no rain, no dawn The bending of flowers can not be stopped" You have a way of weaving words that is all your own...and it is always pure joy to read them.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Perhaps I am too abstract for your document of understanding, maybe you prefer a bigger gift touching your hands this was amazingly beautiful...Gwad can you write! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Fear is naming love, being scared to fall through life learning nothing could it be that complex or is it that simple? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ yeeeesssssss How about me not blaming you for everything |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I touch the water crying wondering, if the skies open would I recognize myself? will I again notice that sometimes beauty is the rain on my shoulders?" Oh my lovely Lauren.... this is so beautiful..awesome write! Love ya lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn... Decidedly one of your very best And? I think JM has it about covered..lol |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
could it be that complex or is it that simple? believe you have revealed here, that it can be as any individual accepts and gives, sees and believes...truly this was magnificant... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
you know Lauren, Ihad to take these lines: Even a white moon can not conceal a hurting heart because I always feel such comfort in the night but yes, it seems that this is when everything hits you right in the face, doesn't it? Life looks different beneath the moon. The Sun seems to block the truth. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sigh...... damn. almost missed this  sigh.... Give me your heart |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Amazing. The raputre and disappointment in that poem was real...I may have interpreted it in the way only my twisted heart can...but I did indeed feel that poem. Beautiful write. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Stillness settles watching butterflies tap glass I listened from the room, you were the last word, ecstasy breaking free between daylight & midnight empty ~greeneyes , the ending of this poem brings a change from day to night takes me back to a memory i have of the street outside of my dads old house he had in the outskirts of the city , the street light use to shine in through the curtains at night,the streets were empty yet peaceful old thoughts and dreams ahh so good to remember those days as a little kid when life was fun no matter what ,friends, toys and cartoons seemed to be the answer back then i try and learn from the past , anyways i am rambling on again lol oh well ... hope your holidays have been good peace xoxo ~wolfy |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I had to come back to this one Lauren, I truly do believe this is the best of the best of yours. You dear lady and Martie share "my" limelight for free verse. Neither of you can be touched! Beautiful read for the 4th time, and this time I remembered to save it finally. Carpe' Diem |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lauren...I would say something cute and sweet, but it wouldn't do justice to the example of pure beautiful poetry you have gifted us with. Thanks so much...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
it's never that simple.  |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
***hand to my chest in awwww*** This is beautiful. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"Even a white moon can not conceal a hurting heart" That says it all... A beautiful write, Lauren... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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