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evomx5
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0 posted 2005-07-12 01:25 PM


The leaves are blowing on the courtyard lawn
Dancing like lovers until they are gone
She sits on a bench in the midst of it all
Watching them fly and watching them fall

I see her from the window of my flat above her
Holding a letter, I think, from her lover
She sobs as she reads each word on the page
Shaking sometimes with little fits of rage

My heart goes out to her, she seems so lost
Her world is shattered at such a cost
And I’d like to tell her she’ll be alright
Tell her I’d comfort her through the night

But she doesn’t know me, I’m just an observer
Watching her plight and wishing to help her
She sits a while longer deep in her thoughts
I open my window but it’s all for naught

She’s walking away and taking her pain
Carrying a heart filled with rain
She drops the letter that caused her such grief
It’s blown away like another leaf.



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-07-12 01:34 PM


You encircled this very well.  Welcome to Passions, and I sincerely hope to soon see more of your writings.


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2 posted 2005-07-12 01:38 PM


Excellent debut post!
Welcome and please enjoy yourself here.
I shall be watching for more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2005-07-12 02:41 PM


Excellent piece of work!! Welcome to pip.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
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4 posted 2005-07-12 02:55 PM


Excellent story and write.  So many times in our lives do we witness those in pain and are unable to help but hopefully we learn compassion from these experiences.  Great poem.

    
~* Carpe' Diem *~

Sunshine
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6 posted 2005-07-13 12:14 PM


evomx5, welcome to Passions!
You've painted a very fine portrait for your first offering. I shall look for more from your pen!  

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2005-07-13 02:04 PM


tearful reactions from your writings...

can feel your words~~

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8 posted 2005-07-13 02:47 PM


I wonder if you could post your poem, "Loss" in here please.  I love that one, and was the first poem I read of yours.  Again, so glad you joined us.  We could sure use some of your wonderful work in the "Inspirational" forum as well.
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2005-07-13 02:53 PM


evomx5
Wecome and an enjoyable read.

Poet deVine
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10 posted 2005-07-13 05:30 PM


Welcome to our humble home. I'm not sure if anyone sent you an Ecard yet with your poem on it so I'm going to do it now. If you get two that's ok....it's nice to read you. I sincerely look forward to reading more from you. Take care.
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11 posted 2005-07-14 11:15 AM


I liked this very much... Welcome to Passions! *S*
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12 posted 2005-07-14 11:29 AM


excellent!
MARK V SHELDON
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13 posted 2005-07-14 12:18 PM


Vivid imagery filled with sympathy and compassion.  A little observation can go a long way when inspired and shared...  Very nice.  Welcome to a very supportive forum.

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