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Kurai Kumo
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0 posted 2005-07-11 09:51 PM



The sudden change in the sky's color,
The suns light trys to penetrate the darkness,
I'm trapped in this world of insanity.
Since you left without even saying goodbye,
Did you deny the love I feel for you,
Left me for the hunger of your presence,
My tourniquet stops me from moving,
I would gladly change to save you from leaving,
Would you do the same for me?
I scream my lungs out for you,
Can you hear it in your heart?
Do you even feel my presence that stands by your side,
While you walk through the unlighted darkness alone,
The betrayal of this world took you away from me,
How could I forgive it?
For what it left me,
And it left me without you in the picture.
But don't cry,
I will search this world until I find you,
And place you in my arms,
And protect you from this cold and heartless world,
Cause nothing will step in my path for you.

Be honest to someone's words cause, in the end they will be honest to yours.

© Copyright 2005 Keith A Rusler - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2005-07-11 10:06 PM


It is so sad when that happens.  The emotion in this is evident.  Well done!
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2005-07-14 01:10 AM


Nice writing...James
Kurai Kumo
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3 posted 2005-07-14 02:13 AM


thanks but im not as good as most people.
Elven Angel
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4 posted 2005-07-14 02:22 AM


I really liked it.
you're so hopeful about finding her.
it's really sad, but I really liked.

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5 posted 2005-07-14 11:21 AM


My tourniquet stops me from moving,
I would gladly change to save you from leaving,
Would you do the same for me?
I scream my lungs out for you,
Can you hear it in your heart?

You write heartbreak so well... I like this very much! *S*

passing shadows
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6 posted 2005-07-15 03:58 AM


I like this one
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7 posted 2005-07-15 10:36 AM


"I scream my lungs out for you,
Can you hear it in your heart?"


this just aches, these lines especially

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