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Sunshine
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0 posted 2005-07-11 06:55 PM




Arts.....&.....Fire

As the vocalist strives to grow
then round the bridge
from raw and raunchy, fooling around
before they try, then
sing that sound in
search of a soul

and you know it when your spine tingles

then they are the ones
who can play an octave as if it were
a ladder hung over their heads
on a school ground again,
and somersault
the air

~*~

As he, or she, touches
their own musical
instrument, their connection
to sound, it is from ear,
and bone, inside out and almost,
upside down

and you know it when your spine shivers


then you hear
one’s birth in earth, as time
is resonant to heat of the heart,
and blood bubbles
in syncopated stimulation
and a tap of foot
returns to earth

~*~

Then…there is the one
who picks up
a quill, hesitantly, then,
with a  vigor, a need,
who hears the song of tempo
beating the earth’s drum

and you know it when your spine moves


this,
is the art of the poet, who
aligns the song to an instrument
then sometimes, with no coronet
nor guitar, let alone a trill of
key, be it brass,
or ivory,
need be.

~*~

This art
of fine tuning
a song,
or a note,
or a line, once wrote,

is never wasted
upon those, who consume
the fire.


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-17-2005 09:22 AM).]

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1 posted 2005-07-11 07:05 PM


"and you know it when your spine tingles"
Yes..yes exactly!!!
Smiling at you lovely lady.
Hugs~N

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Martie
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2 posted 2005-07-11 07:07 PM


Sissie...So true!....I know it when my spine tingles, like now!  
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3 posted 2005-07-11 07:08 PM


this is beautiful
as always

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4 posted 2005-07-11 07:11 PM


Sis....I just read this one to Abby over the telephone.....she loved it and thought it was amazing!  So do I.   ....jo
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5 posted 2005-07-11 07:24 PM


I like this alot.

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6 posted 2005-07-11 08:39 PM


This is oh so true, and -- speaking of tingle -- beautifully said.

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7 posted 2005-07-12 09:59 AM


I-i-i  aa--allways ss-stutter when mmy spine tingles.  

Your thought come out so cleanly and on such diverse areas.
Well said and written.  Hugs, Ken

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The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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8 posted 2005-07-12 10:30 AM


your awareness and ability to look through others is uncanny...you don't mean to, but the deepness of your glances are extraordinary and most unselfish...you absorb with a curiousity and hunger for life, not to mention, savor every moment, as if it were the last....

Incredible....

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9 posted 2005-07-12 10:56 AM


good read
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10 posted 2005-07-16 11:19 AM


  
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11 posted 2005-07-16 12:05 PM


Oh yeah! The artist comes in many forms and the musician can dance with the poet. I loved this!
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12 posted 2005-07-16 03:06 PM


Hello, Sunshine,

   I've read this at least four different times, as it is special to me with my raunchy voice!  I've been working on a song, and I must say it is as pretty as the one you heard--at least I think so... It is slow to write its melody, but it's coming.  Sure wish I could sing.  

Exquisite poetry!

miscee

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (07-16-2005 06:06 PM).]

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13 posted 2005-07-16 06:13 PM


YES!! YES!! I know just what you mean....Magnificent...*big hugs*

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14 posted 2005-07-16 06:41 PM


Oh WOW...

a

Mxx

take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter.

~neruda~

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15 posted 2005-07-16 07:22 PM


That...madame...is poetry and all forms of art in thier quintessence.  Beautiful write.

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16 posted 2005-07-16 09:26 PM


This one got my toes tappin', Kari
Great beat, that enhances the theme, boogie-woogie, like kinda-sorta

The ending is perfect...

"This art
of fine tuning
a song,
or a note,
or a line, once wrote,

is never wasted
upon those, who consume
the fire."

enjoyed
------------ice/ford
   ><>

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17 posted 2005-07-16 11:24 PM


quote:
their connection
to sound, it is from ear,
and bone, inside out and almost,
upside down


EXACTLY! talk about hitting the essence of it!

Sunshine
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18 posted 2005-07-17 09:23 AM


Ah, so glad you all enjoyed this.  Although it has met with a bit of alteration, after two wonderful readers said, "ahm, perhaps..." and I this'd and that'd it, as their suggestions...were very welcome!

Thank you!

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