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A Canary Passing
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A Canary Passing |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Canary Watches The Passing of the Sun In the room the table is heavy legs folded and tucked The canary sings in its center he tells the sun the time singing to the yellow sash of the eastern curtain that watches the apple tree how drenched with fruit he sees for certain I have no lover but warble true says bird Reflecting to the dark side of the pond I hold the evening still within is the reply the frogs den and the fish cease swim in my shadow water’s song come along with me and see your own reflection cast in prisms care the beauty is love’s perfection Just as morning ends and hits cement with hot the trees dance away the sky leaving you and I in dappled light easing over the roof to night The fire takes the air in front and sparks it into the crystals slant across the room as if in dance canary sings to lights like fairies laced with his sweetest vocabulary forgeting for now the pond out back for in the pond he sees his lack Sun dares to dip behind the traces palm soldiers tall with headdress faces erect not bothered by the passing movement of the wind fan dancing the clouds now all swept into place as if a child’s crayon traced the colors of the human spectrum until they mix in genuflection ---- In memory of the sunny place this sweet bird had in my life. 8-22-03 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
aw, Martie hugging you across the miles what a gorgeous write! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
a brilliant memorial  (hugsz) |
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BeWitched Junior Member
since 2005-07-06
Posts 31 |
amazed, i wish i could write like this. Beautiful  |
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saved_by_grace Member
since 2005-01-08
Posts 332In the arms of God... |
This was so beautiful, Martie! Hugging you dear friend!  ~ Becka |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Line after line to capture time, again, and again, just to hear the songbird sing... You do keep memories so precious.... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
magnificant write, you are a master of words and images, this was profound writing |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
the clouds now all swept into place as if a child’s crayon traced the colors of the human spectrum Even though this was inspired by loss... you've captured the joy he brought to life. Magnificent write!! And your picture is great! *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Sun dares to dip behind the traces palm soldiers tall with headdress faces erect not bothered by the passing movement of the wind fan dancing the clouds now all swept into place as if a child’s crayon traced the colors of the human spectrum until they mix in genuflection" So beautiful that it humbles. My son had a bird, and although very mean to her cage mates actually never allowing any of them to live, she sang with such beauty that I simply loved that darn bird. She died about six months ago and I have not moved her cage to this day...I miss her singing so, and I hear it in my mind almost every time I walk by it. I didn't think I would ever keep a caged bird again as there is something so sad about that, but on the other hand, she had a better life with us than she would have had in the pet shop....and she would have probably killed even more cell mates there. (Hope you don't think this post is too strange...just got to waundering, I guess.) *hugs*...jo [This message has been edited by iliana (07-11-2005 07:34 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I remember your distress, when this happened....and after this time, I can say I do finally understand. At the time, I believe I said something that's still true -- that while some of us count and do simple math, and a few even learn the blinding alleys of algebra....you'd written calculus with this poem. I still think that. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oh dear Martie, i don;t know where to start in telling you just how much i love this...my god every line just perfect. IWIHWT sighhh a  Mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So beautiful Martie. You have such an exquisite way of expressing your thoughts and emotions. I so very much enjoyed this piece.. AND I LOVE the new pic!!!!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this touches deeply |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is very special. Birds are unique creatures with which to have a relationship. Their connections to the Earth are older than humans'. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhSis~ You brought the little songbird to life with your sweet memories of song~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And when you rhyme, you are divine! (I love how you fit fairies with vocabulary) Adorable pic, too, lady! (and btw, you are divine all the time, but you truly do some interesting things when you rhyme) *hugs* and let me know how the reading is coming.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
touching words...as one knowing the losses... love your new picture Martie.. *s M |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - touching terrifically written ode to a much loved friend - you do this so very very well - Paul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The canary sings in its center he tells the sun the time ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ how very cool is that thought and image! wonderful! How about me not blaming you for everything |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
my eagle is brass ms martie it always will cast the shadow and never will really fly or leave spots on my fender enjoyed your heart here lady you are lovely |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Martie: forgeting for now the pond out back for in the pond he sees his lack there is no lack to BE seen, m'Lady, but I understand. You bend words like chords . . . creating music. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you for this momentary glimpse through your eyes as only you can tell Ruth |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I heard the song bird again in some yellow glimpse of yestertone... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
My sobs for you, Martie and iliana and both of your much loved birds. May the birds have met my horse in Heaven. His love of all creatures is legendary. - Owl |
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