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a cluster of yellow gods |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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O distant region, foreign shore how you glimmer like the citrine and the topaz: you bid the twilight farewell to come alive in the night like a volcano of gems a cluster of yellow gods: O stellar of stars i, the poet, seek your margins your narrow mouth and coastal arms: the hidden histories folded inside the hemmed petticoat of your skirt that embraces the sea the coral nights and me. take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. ~neruda~ [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (07-09-2005 09:50 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
O distant region, foreign shore how you glimmer like the citrine and the topaz: you bid the twilight farewell to come alive in the night like a volcano of gems a cluster of yellow gods: O stellar of stars i, the poet, seek your margins your narrow mouth and coastal arms: the hidden histories folded inside the hemmed petticoat of your skirt that embraces the sea the coral nights and me. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ OH HOW I WISH I WROTE THIS!!! you rock.... you just simply rock when you write in this muse...yayayaya  very cool poetess Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
blushing and smiling Janet Marie, thank you.  mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
title? "Glimmer"? "Coral Nights"? "Distant Shores"? I know....how about... "Pretend the moth wrote this one"? yayaya lmao........ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I liked "a cluster of yellow gods" but then? that's just me... stunning mah maree  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree "the hidden histories folded inside the hemmed petticoat of your skirt that embraces the sea the coral nights and me." This is so excellent!! |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Oh, how I've missed all of your exquisite poetry. You are writing brilliantly, with such perfect imagery, as has been your hallmark. With deepest respect, Big K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
how this reminded me of a field of sunflowers . . . or coneflowers, regardless it made me feel amazing. thank you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOWWWWW each line shouts poetry standing in awe |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When our surroundings inspire us to such heights... all we can ask, is that we bless them in write! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
over the hills and far away........ bring me along to your golden visions |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh suuuuuuurrrrre.... she comes on here battin her eyelashes and you change the title back. lmao..  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I don't know what the other title was but this one was meant to be it! Gorgeous poem Maree. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm amazed. (y'mean we don't have a duct tape smilie?) naughty, naughty, gal *battin' eyelashes* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beautiful moment here at PIP, Maree! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oh sheesh, i love you guys..sigh. Thank you all so much... and JM? you got it babe!  and m'lady? mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
Hey, can I go there too? Vivid imagery... enjoyed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
(great new pic)  i liked the title, drew me in - like the line in the poem -- like the poem... but after reading it -- I didn't really like this as a title... dunno why.. but it makes no difference, spiffing brilliant anyway.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
you, the poet *smile* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
  Bella |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
incredible writing, D A, but I wouldn't expect anything less from you... ~tier |
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rooster Junior Member
since 2005-07-13
Posts 14New Jersey |
I am new to Passions, but this is incredible poetry. You are very good. I would like to read more of your work. rooster |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Maree... you amaze with words and images...you really do! In your light I learn how to love |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
LOL @ JM and K... and Maree?... Just wow! I absolutely LOVE this... So beautiful... as are you... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
O stellar of stars i, the poet, seek your margins And you find them....oh how you do find them! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ManOfWolves28 Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 83 |
Im seeing stars and reflections of light on wavey water. Nice May the winds sweep through the moonless sky.... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"you bid the twilight farewell to come alive in the night like a volcano of gems a cluster of yellow gods:" You do beautiful work. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
BRAVO!!!  awesome write sweetie, so much talent...keep em coming! ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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