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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2005-07-08 08:01 PM


Are these echoes returned, these reverberate sounds
from the walls of this chamber a construct of man?
Curiosity asks, whispers touch and rebound,
each an intricate part of some pattern and plan.

For this room was designed as a spiritual bridge,
with it's reflective walls in a circle surround.
Built to concentrate sound to define images
through the echoes which seem to rise up from the ground.

There're no markers to indicate what's signified,
in this most solemn place, yet, the message is clear.
Once again whispers touch, and like magic rebound,
from their origins, traced, and returned to you here.

Take a moment to stand in this spot and reflect.
What you hear may contain more than what you'd expect.



© Copyright 2005 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-07-09 07:05 AM




well done

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2005-07-09 05:39 PM


Funny thing about magick, the second you start to question its origin, it disappears.



Enjoyed, doc.


Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2005-07-10 09:56 PM


passing shadows,
Thanks! The inspiration for this came from an Indian casino nearby. As I walked into this perfectly constructed echo chamber, it gave me pause. Why, and to what purpose? Maybe I understood, maybe I didn't. None of that matters. What does matter is that I felt something. A connection. Perhaps, someday, someone will read this in that chamber, listening to the echoes, and, who knows what might happen.

Doc

Serenity,
Aw, no, it ain't like that at all, at least not for me. The more I question, dear, the more questions there are. Answers appear,
just like magic. The onion skin, the cost of sin, this life I'm in, a quart of gin.
No need to go on. It's life, the whole five gallon bucket of it, and I'll drink it down to it's last polluted drop. That's me, the day to day observer of his own demise. Pretty rough huh? Nothin'to it, do it every day. This is why I write.

iliana
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4 posted 2005-07-12 08:24 PM


Much enjoyed this, Doc.   ....jo
surfer
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5 posted 2005-07-13 02:42 AM


Take a moment to stand in this spot and reflect.
What you hear may contain more than what you'd expect


The craftiness of the echo chamber's construction is reflected in the beauty of this sonnet.

Thank You for the metaphor.

Martie
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6 posted 2005-07-13 11:23 AM


Very interesting, Doc...especially after your explanation!  
Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2005-07-13 03:26 PM


"There're no markers to indicate what's signified,
in this most solemn place, yet, the message is clear.
Once again whispers touch, and like magic rebound,
from their origins, traced, and returned to you here"

Sometimes we need to hear what we are saying.

Very much enjoyed, Doc.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 2005-07-13 04:21 PM


iliana,
Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked.
Doc

surfer,
Thank you, I'm not sure if this would still qualify as a sonnet. I've taken more than my share of liberties with it.

Martie,
We're about 45 minutes from the Turning Stone casino here, and it was only recently
they completed construction of an atrium to
there new hotel tower which has the most amazing accoustics. Heck if no-one's around I might I might read this there myself.
Doc

Susan,
Thank you, how true.
Doc

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