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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
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0 posted 2005-06-29 07:50 AM


you were a sunset vanilla
with tennis shoes
and a peace sign

but my eyes were at war
with just wanting more

then pretty painted nails
and could be promises
that were potato chips picnics

in someone else's yard
with cellophane fencing

we drank in the wind wine
with separate mouths
but mine wanted yours

and the sip flavors
it smiled between amazement

and the prophesy of daydreams

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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-06-29 07:52 AM


Damn D....
blew me away with this one big guy.
Yanno whats nice about daydreams?
Sometimes they even come true...

Good morning m'dark friend...

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
2 posted 2005-06-29 08:46 AM


"you were a sunset vanilla
with tennis shoes
and a peace sign

but my eyes were at war
with just wanting more"


wow this is so cool....

good morning D

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2005-06-29 08:51 AM


it smiled between amazement

and the prophesy of daydreams

~*~

Cast the cards to the winds...
and tell me what you see in the bones...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2005-06-29 09:55 AM


you were a sunset vanilla
with tennis shoes
and a peace sign

but my eyes were at war
with just wanting more
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
we drank in the wind wine
with separate mouths
but mine wanted yours

and the sip flavors
it smiled between amazement

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I'm just sitting here smiling smiling smiling.
you need a camera inside your head to capture the way your groovy poetic mind works.

Writers try to capture the exhilaration of Nature & inspiration of Love.
The attempts may be futile, the endeavors are all things that is poetry.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2005-06-29 10:41 AM


thanks ganga's for the touch and the reviews..you just keep on blessing this ol metal man


Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
6 posted 2005-06-29 10:51 AM


D- I especially enjoyed this one - I love the magic you weave with your words, images, and imaginings - S
Juju
Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
7 posted 2005-06-29 11:10 AM


I always like to to read yours because you like to put a setting and then reflect.  


-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Cloud 9
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since 2004-11-05
Posts 980
Ca
8 posted 2005-06-29 11:19 AM


Very nice
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
9 posted 2005-06-29 11:25 AM


I just can't help but smile when I read you.

Nice that you have returned~~

M

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