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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2005-06-21 11:52 PM


~*~

Letting out the long line of summer
without questioning direction or the days ahead
slow sails billow, cutting through blue water
past the reef and breaking waves

floating un tethered, offshore in the breeze.

Aware of the slack holding me in the balance
where all my love is released
as if each knot has slipped
pulling through unfamiliar channels

yet stronger than ever in the fraying sunlight and harsher elements.

Suddenly arriving in a safe harbor of dreams
and answered prayers that have come full circle
your cool hand provides an awning shading my eyes
from the tear streaked sunset that marks the sky

staying the course of my weathered wavering.

Awash in the glaze of midnight
that gleams a velvet lightening
angles the planes of your face in my curves
separating your eyelashes in the shadows

misting me in synergy.

Oh my heart weighs heavy in the moment
and I have no words
for my telling lies in quiet slumber
and easy breathing

of silent stars falling on a grateful sea.

~*~

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Honeybunch
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1 posted 2005-06-22 01:12 AM


Oh, I loved this one Bluesy gal!  
passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-06-22 01:36 AM


how vivid this is

good write

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2005-06-22 04:19 AM


A beautiful flow of words...James
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with you
4 posted 2005-06-22 10:20 AM


yes, beautiful...
LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-06-22 11:52 AM


this was filled with imagry and beauty

this...

Awash in the glaze of midnight
that gleams a velvet lightening
angles the planes of your face in my curves
separating your eyelashes in the shadows

awesome....


Juju
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In your dreams
6 posted 2005-06-22 12:35 PM


I like this alot!

_Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Martie
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7 posted 2005-06-22 12:38 PM


Lori

I'd pick the same lines as LeeJ did...How beautiful!!  

Kristabell
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8 posted 2005-06-22 01:09 PM


This is beautiful. A wonderful heart filled piece.

Kristabell

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
9 posted 2005-06-22 02:12 PM


Thank you kindly~
Startime55
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10 posted 2005-06-22 02:20 PM


WOW!!! A vision to caress the heart...Magnificent...I could almost hear the ocean...*big hugs*

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2005-06-22 02:28 PM


OMG Lori!  These images are so divine and gave me such a peaceful feeling...

oh dear, I do believe this has just become my favorite from you.  

It is good to see you here m'friend.  Hugs.

suthern
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12 posted 2005-06-22 03:23 PM


your cool hand provides an awning shading my eyes
from the tear streaked sunset that marks the sky

Absolutely beautiful!!! And the ending... oh, gal... this is a grand slam home run! *S*

adagio
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13 posted 2005-06-22 08:46 PM


Very well done
enjoyed!

Ratleader
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14 posted 2005-06-22 11:46 PM


Such gentle beauty.....you just took me along with you, the whole way. This is wonderful, Lori.

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