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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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They slowly slide, as though struggling to quell and remain. The earth lies near ...as does he. They tremble, shimmer, quiver... Waiting, for that moment just before they are gone. They touch my face, cool my hand, moisten my lips..embarrass me. And, in the end, when the rains no longer mask and dry winds take from them their essence...a turned head hides, gently releases...and then they fall. Some days, soft clouds carry them on a slow journey, looking from high, in want of a parched field, a weathered hand....a pursed lip in need of dampening. For there are clouded days, clear and somber days when a grown man remembers... And cries.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"For there are clouded days, clear and somber days when a grown man remembers... And cries...." Tears are welling in my own eyes as well... Barry, I always feel your words.  Linda |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh mag/barryman... you leave me without a punchline here.  Very lovely and nice job of point of view exercize from an "old man"--the proof of a real writer is to write from another's perspective effectively. You pulled it off, dude. You write with maturity beyond your years.   I enjoyed the soft flow of this, like an unexpected breeze. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There are those moments ... synchronicity of tears and rain ... feeling the grip of melancholy so deeply. Touching write, only a truly strong man will ever admit these moments of emotional release. You have done it beautifully, dear Barry. Love, Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my....this is touching  and more |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Those memories, the tears... only show how special the man... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"For there are clouded days, clear and somber days when a grown man remembers... And cries...." May I just echo what Karilea said above... and give you a tight hug. Well done Barry. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
stunning!!!!!!! and hey... what part of SC do you hail from? Thats where I am too |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry/very "They touch my face, cool my hand, moisten my lips..embarrass me" Be proud of those, as I am proud of you for admitting them ....they are part of what make you so special! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ I've read this ... re-read it ... then came back again~ Take this *hug* ... will ya' ? Beautiful emotions penned here my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
verbal narritive which reflect emotions centered and shared...Barry, an awesome wright graces mine eyes...welcome home, I've missed reading you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Words, words that take you there....to sit alongside what is described, to be there completely and no where else for the moment....this is what this poem does, this is poetry. ----------------ice ><> |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
WOW!! Such a strong ability to touch the heart and make a grown woman cry too...Well done, dear friend...*big hugs* |
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