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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2005-06-16 08:03 AM


Rewrite


Dust In My Eyes

Shadows cast upon the sea
Darkness slows the quick of me.
While doubt tears away the sail
I cannot wait much more the bale.

Those truths and phantoms that exist
All things that I cannot resist
Please pity me this aging shell
Make known to me the timeless spell.

Oh spirit that I feel and fear
That echoes chaos in my ear.
Pendulums my minds desire
Burns me in consuming fire.

Let me trust eternity
The feel of loves fraternity
Just one moment’s flight of peace
Just one moment of release

Forever lifts me on its wings
Yet still I see the dust of things.

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-06-16 08:36 AM



That's because beneath fragility,
lies the breath of reality...

Ah, good.  You're making me think
this morning...

and now, a good one you've made it!






scorpio
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right...there
2 posted 2005-06-16 09:53 AM


Sy, I too find much to ponder in this write. It stirs the mind.

believe in what your heart feels...

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3 posted 2005-06-16 10:08 AM


Seymour~

'Make known to me the timeless spell.'

'Let me trust eternity
The feel of loves fraternity'


My friend, I have NO doubt that you have come to know the both of these~

Thanking you for this daily dose of Seymour-Thought-A-Graphs~

*Huglets*:hugs to you~
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

SEA
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4 posted 2005-06-16 10:10 AM


"Let me trust eternity
The feel of loves fraternity
Just one moment’s flight of peace
Just one moment of release"

I liked this very much!

passing shadows
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5 posted 2005-06-16 10:12 AM


just my kind of write
well done Sy

Enchantress
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6 posted 2005-06-16 10:27 AM


Good morning and well done Sy!
I'm on the run...blowing kisses
and I'm out the door.
Hugs~Nancy

Startime55
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7 posted 2005-06-16 11:08 AM


The wind caresses soft my mind
With visions of this treasured find
Such words that open wide to me
The joy of spirit soaring free

The visions you paint touch this reader with a magic that sets flight to the imagination...Your work is a treasure to be savored for its delicate flavor like a fine wine....Wonderful writing...you inspire me with your talented visions...*big hugs*

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2005-06-16 02:53 PM


Sunshine
Thank you love.

scorpio
And so it was ment.

Marge
Thank yopu sweety.

SEA
I thank you very much.

passing
Thank you dear.

Nancy
Don't run so fast you'll miss the

Startime55
And you have just buttered my bread. LOL

Cloud 9
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9 posted 2005-06-16 04:13 PM


Beautiful.
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2005-06-16 04:59 PM


Cloud 9
Thank you.

saved_by_grace
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11 posted 2005-06-16 06:02 PM


Let me trust eternity
The feel of loves fraternity
Just one moment’s flight of peace
Just one moment of release

Forever lifts me on its wings
Yet still I see the dust of things.



This was so beautiful, Sy!!  Glad I stopped by this lovely day to read you!

Take care, good buddy!

....  Becka



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12 posted 2005-06-16 06:21 PM


Forever lifts me on its wings
Yet still I see the dust of things.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Well then...I'll just have to have Randy fly me there with my feather duster and tickle you pink.

*ww*

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2005-06-16 08:13 PM


Becka
So glad you stopped bye, thank you.

JM,
Now that would be a delight WW Stinky

Justbleu
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14 posted 2005-06-17 02:07 PM


Sy I alwayz enjoy your writing....

Nice!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink


Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2005-06-17 03:22 PM


Justbleu,
Thank you I enjoy your reading me and replies.

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