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Juju
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In your dreams

0 posted 2005-06-14 12:21 PM


You come from the ocean
I dare not follow to
The rivers in your mind
-I can still taste the salt-

I'm dancing in your hands
Like sand, will I slip through?
so we blame origin
-the truths are in our faults-

I come from the desert
protected by mountains
substanance can be found
even where there's no rain

I wonder if you'll look
Or find luck in a fountain
for enough happyness...
Wonder... if we'd sustain

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-06-14 12:28 PM


yup, sustain you would

uhhhh huh...see that, I have faith in you, and so should you...

Hugs enjoyed this a lot

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
2 posted 2005-06-14 01:39 PM


YEah,
I wonder if the poem was weakened by the way it was kind of repeated though...

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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