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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2005-06-08 07:58 AM



Stars sipping colors
through the straws
of the tree umbrellas,
rainbows and butterflies
recycle lost dreams

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-06-08 08:07 AM


oh wow!

love this inky!
this style looks so good on you (of course, what doesn't?)

Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2005-06-08 08:10 AM


vivid images
through your eyes
to pages of blue Michelle...

bringing life into full view and bloom.

lovin it!

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2005-06-08 12:54 PM


ah..I like the images..and the idea... and how they fit with the title..

letting us get lost in the moment as well..

nicely done...

Enchantress
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4 posted 2005-06-08 01:40 PM


Very lovely Michele..
Much enjoyed the imagery.
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Margherita
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5 posted 2005-06-08 04:22 PM


quote:
recycle lost dreams



Michele, this is very beautiful and and the three words above are simply fantastic!

Love, Margherita

bklynboy
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6 posted 2005-06-09 05:49 PM


Very nice
inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2005-06-10 07:17 AM


thanks a bunch
JamesMichael
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8 posted 2005-06-12 01:25 AM


Enjoyed...James
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9 posted 2005-06-12 12:48 PM


InkyOne~

LOVELY imagery here~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Earth Angel
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10 posted 2005-06-14 09:10 AM



"Stars sipping colors
through the straws
of the tree umbrellas,"

~ words written from a true goddess...

and what would we ever do without those butterflies and rainbows?!?


Linda

ThisDiamond
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11 posted 2005-06-15 11:10 PM


You know,
I think you see each moment in living color Michelle.  Inspiring write.
TD

sandgrain
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12 posted 2005-06-15 11:32 PM


What a picture this paints!  Wonderful choice of words.

  Rae

inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2005-06-16 07:08 AM


thanks for this moment
littlewing
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14 posted 2005-06-16 08:07 AM


and this is what I love about you, Michele.
The simplest words bring forth such a bang!
it's beautiful!

Cloud 9
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15 posted 2005-06-16 04:07 PM


Very nice!
ice
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16 posted 2005-06-17 06:21 AM


Michelle
Sometimes nature shows how connected our spirits are to it..

"rainbows and butterflies
recycle lost dreams"

A simple sounding statement when first read, but the surface of those words hide something very deep.

Wordsworth felt this, I feel it, apparently, so do you.

"I have felt
A presence that disturbs me with the joy
Of elevated thoughts; a sense sublime
Of something far more deeply interfused,
Whose dwelling is the light of setting suns,
And the round ocean and the living air,
And the blue sky, and in the mind of man.."
("Tintern Abby")

One tiny thought, Inky..Perhaps you could eliminate "the" in this line...

" of the tree umbrellas"

Of course that is the opinion of one who has added many words that might have been left out of his own poetry....just a thought..

Well done, and well enjoyed

----------ice/ford
    ><>


LeeJ
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17 posted 2005-06-17 09:02 AM


I believe, nature is who we are, and therein lies many secrets of knowledge,,,and you have transformed an understanding of gathering...simply stunning write
Dark Angel
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18 posted 2005-06-17 09:21 AM


peaceful and heavenly



mxx

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

inkedgoddess
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19 posted 2005-06-17 09:43 AM


thanks for seeing this too
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