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vlraynes
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0 posted 2005-06-05 02:51 PM




In Silent Weep

A muse is dead and buried deep
No ink will flow in verse this day
A poet sits in silent weep

The sun is lost in shadow's keep
The sky once blue now hints of gray
A muse is dead and buried deep

Harsh winds of loss through windows seep
Dishevelled heart fills with dismay
A poet sits in silent weep

The tiny frog has lost his leap
The birds are hushed and fly away
A muse is dead and buried deep

With inspiration fast asleep
Poetic verse has gone astray
A poet sits in silent weep

'Tis life we sow but death we reap
Sweet flowers wilt to dead bouquet
A muse is dead and buried deep
A poet sits in silent weep

_________________


*Another repost...

Sorry...

bear with me, please?...

© Copyright 2005 Vicky L. Raynes - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2005-06-05 02:56 PM


This is certainly worth a repost - The way I see it, that silent muse managed to pen this perfectly formatted villanelle in flawless iambic tetrameter... and developed a theme pretty well in the process...

All of our muses should be so silent, ya know??...

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2 posted 2005-06-05 03:28 PM


Gosh I love this.. not just for the words, but also because I want so much to write one of these, but just cant seem to organize my thoughts enough to stay within the guidelines of a Villanelle

Great work Vicky

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3 posted 2005-06-05 04:27 PM


Wow, I thought that was amazing.  It is my first time actually seeing an example of a villanelle (I hope I spelled that correctly).  I am enchanted.  Very nice write.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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4 posted 2005-06-05 04:47 PM


Well Vicky a repost from you is always welcome.  Hey!  Join the club, I can not find words either, suppose we used them all up?   Nice reading anything of yours.


~* Carpe' Diem *~

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5 posted 2005-06-05 05:26 PM


Vic....fire when ready.... repost smeepost,
does not matter.  Nicely done as well.

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6 posted 2005-06-05 06:14 PM


It's been a while since I read a poem that doesn't have any punctuation.  Interesting style of structure, thought process, and rhyme scheme.

Life is wasted on the living.

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7 posted 2005-06-05 06:22 PM


When you repost...I know it is
important to you...

thus...

even more important to us!


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8 posted 2005-06-05 09:39 PM


something we can all relate to, yes

thanks for the repost

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9 posted 2005-06-05 10:49 PM


This is fantastic. Very nice.
S Arthur Grey
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10 posted 2005-06-05 11:17 PM


Reposts like this are welcome.

But you know what they say,
it takes only two lines a day . . .

CastleGuard
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11 posted 2005-06-06 11:01 AM



A great villanelle. We don't see too many of those these days...

Thank you for reposting.

CG

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12 posted 2005-06-06 02:33 PM


I tip my "halo" to you! I am tucking this beautifully written villanelle safely away!



Not only was it perfect in form, but I felt every word of it!


Linda

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13 posted 2005-06-06 03:04 PM


Vicky~
I'd say your little muse is simply doing some R&R ... and the perfection of this Villanelle shows why she has needed it~

*Huglets*
~*Me

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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14 posted 2005-06-07 09:30 AM


I have always envied your God given talent for verse and understanding it. You are like a musician, you know?  Sounding off each beat . . . waiting for the rest of the band to catch up to your lead.

(Muse is dead - Good Lord then mine has died a longgg time ago)


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15 posted 2005-06-07 04:24 PM


Don't make me come there and "shake" you.




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16 posted 2005-06-07 05:01 PM


Vick, your muse and mine sit together, weeping. Love this, you have the perfect way of explaining it.
Sandra

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17 posted 2005-06-09 11:57 PM



Sorry to be so slow in getting back here...

but I want you all to know just how much I appreciate your kind comments and encouragement...

It means more to me than you know...

and Karen?...

I'd welcome that... *smile*

Love to you all...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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