kaile
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
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2005-06-05
02:26 PM
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The duo's chatter surged and ebbed like some furious flow of vocal gymnastics
they pulled all appropriate twitches and creases and deployed their energetic hand movements
sometimes their bodies inched close to convey interest
Helpfully covering up their bulldozer driver act of navigating their thoughts on opposite sides of the road
unaware/unconcerned/uncaring for the lack of convergence
feeling safe in the inaneness of it all
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
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2005-06-05
02:35 PM
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A keen sense of observation is necessary in a good poet. You have that sense ~ and it is very keen!
I could see ~ and hear them ~ in their inane private (yet not so private!) world!
~ and kaile, I commend you on your 5,000th illustrious post!
Linda
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Marge Tindal
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since 1999-11-06
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2005-06-05
02:41 PM
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Kaile~
Firstly let me congratulate you on your 5000th post, my friend~
NEXTLY -
'vocal gymnastics'
OH MY ... that is soooooooooooooooo good !
Wonderful to read your versatility dear one~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))><
Email noles1@totcon.com
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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
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2005-06-05
02:49 PM
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This is a cute write, dear Kaile. It was like watching a movie!
You rendered the sounds and the gestures so very well!
And CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 5000th post. Wow this is a great achievement!
I hope dear Linda will not reproach me for capturing the lovely
Love, Margherita
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yv
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 574
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2005-06-05
04:29 PM
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Beautiful. I am not a good critic. I oft more than times than not see something that inspires me. This is no exception. I loved it. Sorry if I am doing you a disservice. I sincerely apologize.Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.
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Midnitesun
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since 2001-05-18
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Gaia
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2005-06-05
07:13 PM
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loved the bulldozer image lol, my, but you always offer such unique thoughts and perspectives have missed you, my friend! so it's great to read you again, and to view your LIFE snapshots ~keeper~
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passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
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2005-06-05
09:28 PM
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Congrats on the big 5000
A fantastic write!
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kaile
Member Ascendant
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
singapore
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2005-06-06
10:56 AM
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thanks for the comments and for celebrating along with me!
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