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kaile
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0 posted 2005-06-05 02:26 PM


The duo's chatter surged and ebbed
like some furious flow
of vocal gymnastics

they pulled all appropriate
twitches and creases
and deployed their
energetic hand movements

sometimes their bodies inched close
to convey interest

Helpfully covering up
their bulldozer driver act
of navigating
their thoughts on
opposite sides of the road

unaware/unconcerned/uncaring
for the lack of convergence

feeling safe in the inaneness of it all


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1 posted 2005-06-05 02:35 PM


A keen sense of observation is necessary in a good poet. You have that sense ~ and it is very keen!

I could see ~ and hear them ~ in their inane private (yet not so private!) world!

~ and kaile, I commend you on your 5,000th illustrious post!  Cheerleader


Linda


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2 posted 2005-06-05 02:41 PM


Kaile~

Firstly let me congratulate you on your 5000th post, my friend~

NEXTLY -

'vocal gymnastics'

OH MY ... that is soooooooooooooooo good !


Wonderful to read your versatility dear one~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Margherita
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3 posted 2005-06-05 02:49 PM


This is a cute write, dear Kaile. It was like watching a movie!

You rendered the sounds and the gestures so very well!

And CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 5000th post. Wow this is a great achievement!

I hope dear Linda will not reproach me for capturing the lovely  

Love, Margherita

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4 posted 2005-06-05 04:29 PM


Beautiful. I am not a good critic.  I oft more than times than not see something that inspires me.  This is no exception.  I loved it.  Sorry if I am doing you a disservice.  I sincerely apologize.

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5 posted 2005-06-05 07:13 PM


loved the bulldozer image
lol, my, but you always offer such unique thoughts and perspectives
have missed you, my friend!
so it's great to read you again, and to view your LIFE snapshots
~keeper~

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6 posted 2005-06-05 09:28 PM


Congrats on the big 5000

A fantastic write!

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7 posted 2005-06-06 10:56 AM


thanks for the comments and for celebrating along with me!
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