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Balladeer
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0 posted 2005-05-26 08:16 PM



He placed the page in front of me.
'Read it" he said.
The sentences were in the form
of geometrical shapes.
I read up one side of the square
across the top, down the other side
across the bottom
up the triangle
down the triangle
around the circle
trying to piece the words together.
The sentences curled up the spirals
disappearing at the turns
to reappear with words missing.

I lifted the page. The words
slid down the paper to land in a heap
at the bottom.
I held the page out
giving it the forty-niner shake
trying to get the words back in place
no gold.

'Never mind', he said.
'You just don't get it."

I looked again.
The words had become worms
leaving slimy tracks
as they made their way
over the blank white surface

and I knew he was right.

© Copyright 2005 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-05-26 08:19 PM


Bless your ever-lovin' heart!
You give it a go...

and glow!

Thank you for at least TRYING!

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2 posted 2005-05-26 08:21 PM


And even I can recognize the sarcasm! Cool... I so agree.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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3 posted 2005-05-26 08:21 PM


Well done 'Deer!!!
Hugs~N.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2005-05-26 09:05 PM


Michael?  hmmm, grumble....maybe it's not so important to understand it.  Cute the way you wrote this...made me smile!  
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5 posted 2005-05-26 09:27 PM


Sarcasm laced with a touch of ingenuity and
sheer frustation....me thinks!!

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6 posted 2005-05-26 10:31 PM


enjoyed this
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7 posted 2005-05-26 10:38 PM


Sunshine..thanks for the encouragement but my 'go' doesn't go  very far!

Larry...sarcasm? Moi?? No way!  

Enchantress..

Martie..this doesn't apply to your work, which I am in complete envy of!

Magnus...LOL! That about sums it up!

Thank you, Dixie...

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8 posted 2005-05-26 10:54 PM


Well, whatever position you be in, Dear Balls of Deer, I can read you like a book! ~ and you're a real page turner!

Loveya, funny man!
EA

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9 posted 2005-05-27 12:22 PM


Thank you, Angel...wanna see my appendix?
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10 posted 2005-05-27 01:44 AM


Mike, with a huge smile spreading across my face, I have to tell you ~~ I admire a brain with a sense of humor all wrapped up in a great sense of humility. You are something else! martyjo
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11 posted 2005-05-27 01:47 AM


I loved this.  I write in free verse and don't even understand what I write myself most of the time hehe

You win my vote just for trying.

Gotta love the poem that don't rhyme I always say.  It makes you use your imagination.

Tima

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12 posted 2005-05-27 03:18 AM


Why worms?  Because they have no feet?

Did I win the prize?

Iamb confused.  

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13 posted 2005-05-27 07:08 AM


Michael, you can write in ANY style and still manage to make me smile with admiration. This was great. I'll bet you had a hard time "not" sneeking in a rhyme here or there though, lol.

Always wonderful to read you, my 'Deer. Great job on this, loved the visuals!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

(PS ... ROFL @ Local Parasite's reply!)

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14 posted 2005-05-27 07:42 AM


Balladeer
What did you say? LOL See you when I get back.

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15 posted 2005-05-27 09:33 AM


Balladeer~

You *tickle* me ... and I love it~

Catch you in real-rhyme time~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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16 posted 2005-05-27 09:54 AM


m'friend you can write anything and it will be perfect!  Enjoyed this side of you.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

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17 posted 2005-05-27 12:26 PM


Hardy har har! Your "appendix"! I liked that "foot" note!

At times you are a bit "forward" ~ but I like that in a bookworm!

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18 posted 2005-05-27 08:09 PM


Late Arrival....thank you! I like putting a smile on your face...)

Tima...certainly DOES spur on the imagination! Thanks for the sweet encouragement!

Local Parasite....ROFL!! You are a real villain, L. Parasite!!


Kit..Hey, I don't rhyme all the time. How can you say I write that way? Golly, gee - you misjudge me!!!

Sy...until then, Sy. Have a great time!!

Marge...you got it! See you there....

Gentle Spirit...thanks for being on my "side".

Earth Angel...forward? Me? NEVER!! (see you between the covers)

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