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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-05-26 07:33 AM



the village of echoes
where the quiet men wander
they wear the black colors
and pretend to be night
only the metal of them
is seen for moments

before the dawn
when a suspicious sun
opens her window slice
and touches the sounds
of wet grass bowing
and whispered trees

chanting the kata songs
they are unison
ununited as the hair
of warriors steeds
when galloped to battles
on the plains of barco

and the maidens pray with laughter
______________
dark  (scribblenote: kanan ends up in malibu, the back way..late at night it is surreal)


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-05-26 07:35 AM


very descriptive

well done

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-05-26 07:51 AM


this so reminded me of the last samurai, loved that movie...
and your poem even more...

Hello and Good Morning, good to see you, was thinking of you last night, when the news was reporting the killer whales gathering for the grey whale migration along the coast out there your way...have you seen them? They had some exceptional shots....

Happy Day to ya and thanks so much for sharing.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2005-05-26 10:12 AM


your lines and visions wisk me into the surreal - much enjoyed this d-

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Sunshine
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4 posted 2005-05-26 10:27 AM


Agoura Hills
...

canyon and adobe homes...
dirt roads shifting
under summer winds
and pinyons
talk to me...

~*~

Thank you for taking me back...

SEA
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with you
5 posted 2005-05-26 05:28 PM


"before the dawn
when a suspicious sun
opens her window slice
and touches the sounds
of wet grass bowing
and whispered trees"


enjoyed this

youcan'tseeme
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6 posted 2005-05-26 05:35 PM


the excpert from SEA also struck me


Very much enjoyed

thank you

Cloud 9
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7 posted 2005-05-26 06:12 PM


Me too. (what SEA quoted)

Loved that part.

Margherita
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8 posted 2005-05-28 01:02 PM


With your mind's eye you see beyond the real and the imagery and atmosphere you share is indeed very captivating.

Love, Margherita

Martie
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9 posted 2005-05-28 04:05 PM


I know that road, DS..it is beautiful in the daytime too.  Enjoyed it much, through your eyes!  

[This message has been edited by Martie (05-28-2005 07:29 PM).]

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