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Dad Died
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Dad Died |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA 
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Dad Died You said, “this conversation is over, and you with it.” but it’s not. I continue to talk, to probe the possibilities dialoguing at times bridging the gaps attimesnot You declared, “I’ll live life on my terms, no one else’s” but you didn’t. Life had other plans and whispered loud over your protestations, to carry the day, with no contradiction save one You argued with death, and death bowed, briefly you made your point it came granting you a certain dignity, unachieved, but granted posthumously I saw the man I wished you were, and hope to be my presence as you died taken your death a gift to me and now I wear your ring What will I say? Who will listen? Will anyone be there with me? As I was with you. © Bart Breen 2005 never try to teach a pig to sing |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the emotions reach out from this...and touch...  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: A statement related to a sacred moment when there was clarity. Very touching write. Love, Margherita |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
You said, “this conversation is over, and you with it.” but it’s not. I continue to talk, to probe the possibilities dialoguing at times bridging the gaps attimesnot I really like how you highlighted emotions through your spacing or lack of... Your poem is very touching. miscellanea |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The set of emotions, the give and take of relationships the spacing of hurt... spoke well of the father/son turmoil that many face, and that some choose not to face at all. Well done, Sir. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I do believe that you have bridged the gaps ~ and you have done it poetically ~ and convincingly. God bless you! ~ and your father, posthumously. Love & Life Eternal, EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Bart..good to read you again. I've missed reading my fellow Canadian. Well done Sir..this touches deep. Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
very well done. the emotion rips. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I can't comment on this one. The memories it brought were too personal. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Canuckster So very well done! |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
enjoyed sir...very touching |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing....James |
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