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Open Poetry #35

metalman handstands

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-05-24 09:52 AM

I always did prefer
the metal sounds
to the whimpering
of bending wood
when the winds came

to do their have to things

and the woman of brass
that steps high her hem
when she wants to climb
the trees above the clouds
over the water woman

that just seeps

and looks at the sky
and wishes her dreams
had bigger hands
than her fear feet
had fingers

so now I draw the cards

from a deck of plenty
and sort the queens
from jokers
to stack the deck
in favor of a woman

without a plastic nametag

_______________
dark

(scribblenote: measuring maturity

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-05-24 10:06 AM

"so now I draw the cards

from a deck of plenty
and sort the queens
from jokers"

enjoyed the read....

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-05-24 10:33 AM

An honest hand
receives the largest pot

~*~

at least, that's what you made me think.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2005-05-24 04:00 PM

Well, I am a water woman ... in my element the metallic sounds are softened and ... I hear the sound of your core ...

And it's a tender sound ... of fused metal.

Love, Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2005-05-24 05:54 PM

thanks to you for the eyes here

and margherita...waterwoman is nice

especially when metal is playing in the ripples..thanks for the prospective

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2005-05-24 11:15 PM

(edited by moderator-for inappropriate comments)

[This message has been edited by SEA (05-26-2005 08:45 AM).]

Canuckster
Member

since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

6 posted 2005-05-24 11:21 PM

beatiful job mixing the metphores and evoking a prescribed feeling.

you took me there.

never try to teach a pig to sing
it wastes your time AND annoys the pig

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