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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

0 posted 2005-05-23 01:22 PM

The days whine of fallen petals.
Springtime warmth is in the air,
even as a never-ending ache flares
within these chilled solitary bones.

I still hear your laughter
in my sweaty night dreams,
watch you throw your head back
to let go all the day’s traumas
even as pain dared you to scream.

We climbed love’s hillside together,
jumped over puddles and pebbles
pretending it would never end.
In our hearts, it never did.

Dust settles on frayed carpets,
and the petals whine
the scent of yesterday,
as I breathe you in.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2005-05-23 02:14 PM

Such a wonderful way to remember yesterday, dear Kacy!
The heart is the place where we can store the scent of yesterday and recall it when the yearning becomes unbearable.
I think it's good to do as if ... otherwise we would never really enjoy the moment.

Love, Margherita

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2005-05-23 02:50 PM

OhKacy~
On an eve of remember ... this touches me deeply~

'We climbed love’s hillside together,
jumped over puddles and pebbles
pretending it would never end.
In our hearts, it never did.

Dust settles on frayed carpets,
and the petals whine
the scent of yesterday,
as I breathe you in.'

*sigh* ... sooooooo very touching~
Beautiful write dear poetess~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

3 posted 2005-05-23 03:08 PM

poignant in its beauty -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2005-05-23 07:24 PM

Beautiful!

Eric

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2005-06-07 03:39 PM

Kacy, It seems we never forget. Well done.
Sandra

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2005-06-08 10:14 AM

This one is beautiful. It affected me too much to say more.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2005-06-08 10:24 AM

Kacy, there was not a hint of saddness in this, just great admiration for a moment in time...knowing the purpose of it, will give you great moments the rest of your life.

Wonderfully done! Thank you for sharing.

wandering glider
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since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

8 posted 2005-06-08 03:50 PM

I like the touch of this.
Nicely done.

(I do wonder about the use of "whine". Explain? As I read it I also wonder if I might try "wine" instead. That's stretching usage, but it might work.)

glider

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2005-06-08 11:40 PM

glider, it's wine or whine, sometimes both simultaneously, depending upon the moment.
LOL, I whine when the day falls too soon, when I am not ready for it to end but it does anyway...then I whine with my wine. Does that make sense? ~sigh~ some days I fly out of control.

But thanks to everyone here for keeping me grounded

and also for lifting me up? I know, I'm offering a confused metaphor here....LOL, no apologies though.
It's just me.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2005-06-09 04:43 AM

very touching write Kacy

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